Move With Me: chpt 6

[jingy5]

WARNING: This chpt is a bit different than the usual…please let me know if you like my writing style for these scenes b/c the language has changed slightly, so I can describe the scenes clearer, but the rating for this fic won’t change from a ‘T’… The party continues!!!

When Eiji turned back to find Fuji, the smaller man was gone. He quickly

Comments

[tacuma811]

I absolutely loved this chapter! It's awesome!
I love how Fuji is dancing with everybody, so hot! XD XD
But I'm glad he ends up with Tezuka again ^__^
I like your writing style, but I also like the way you wrote the previous chapters.

[jingy5]

*wipes brow* i'm glad you liked this one.. lol you've become my most faithful critic so i as ecstatic to read your review..

i was really worried that the dancing scenes werent very descriptive -i tried going for the general club dances *grin*- and i was seriously tempted to leave Tez alone in his little bout of self pity but *sigh* even i cant leave Tez too angst for long

[tacuma811]

^__^ I really love your fic, you did a good job on the latest chapter too!
I'm honored to be your most faithful critic XD If you ever need help, or if you want me to look at something particular in your fic, just ask me, I don't mind helping you at all ^_~

I loved the dancing scenes. I could imagine them and it was really hot XD Fuji dancing like that with Shiraisha = so good, Fuji dancing like that with Atobe = drooling, but Fuji dancing with Tezuka like that is...*dies*
I'm glad you didn't leave Tezuka all alone, I would have felt so sorry for him! I'm so glad that Fuji finds him again and that they share the last dance ^__^ I can't wait for the next chapter! How many more chaps will you write? Or don't you know that yet?

[jingy5]

OMG how many chpts.. i have no idea.. *sigh* i get the feeling that its drifting away from the original concept of an Olympic romance so i might flash-forward the nex chpt to just before they leave for Beijing -otherwise this story would never end lol- and then continuing on to the trials of championships and such

and plus i am so looking forward to writing their after parties lol lol

[elysis]

Fuji sure knows how to dance, no xD?
I like the idea of Eiji trying his best to seperate Fuji and Tezuka. This is so typical of Eiji, caring and protective towards his friends, and a bit too impetuous too.

Btw, You were right, it should be 'dragged'.
And I don't think the descriptions' overboard, I always like fics with a well described surroundings and atmosphere.

I like this chapter. And I will definitely wait for more. :)

[jingy5]

*sigh* you have no idea how good it feels to hear you say that you liked the descriptions lol i was really nervous about those -never wrote like that before.. it's so thrilling *grin*-

shhh, dont tell tacuma811, but i like Eiji trying to seperate them too