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Nosebleed

May 03, 2011 21:11

Title: Nosebleed
Rating: R
Author: JiriayaWhitney
Characters/Pairing/s: Tsunayoshi Sawada, Gokudera Hayato, Yamamoto Takeshi, OC, 5927, OC80
Warning/s: Crack, nervousness, abuse of timeskips, lame jokes (if you squint), nosebleeds
Disclaimer: KHR isn't mine. Excuse me while I cry (hey, that almost rhymed)
Summary: A bi-gay club on the other side of town ( Read more... )

5927, gokutsuna, khr, yaoi

Comments 11

reidluver May 4 2011, 06:53:35 UTC

Heh, gotta admit I was a bit concerned there with the whole comments on the hair being blond. XD Then when it was called silver I felt better. Very cool!

jiriayawhitney May 7 2011, 04:04:24 UTC

Yosh. Point? Acheived.
(Point being: make people believe it's a Tsuna-has-smexy-times-with-other-person-is-scared-turns-to-Gokudera-for-help,-and-gets-it-on)
....
Shitty bunnies.
*pushes LJ window to the back of the screen*
BBI...IDKtime.

reidluver May 9 2011, 18:36:24 UTC

Heh, well you definitely achieved your point. XD And yeah, those plot bunnies really are horrible, aren't they? But at the same time we wouldn't have fanfics without them, so it's more of a love-hate relationship I suppose.

jiriayawhitney May 16 2011, 00:13:27 UTC

Sadly, that doesn't make it any better. :) (She says, cuddling her very furry, very friendly bunnies with vampyr teeth as they sink their fangs in.)

katechibi May 4 2011, 13:58:39 UTC

Lol, that would be hilarious, if they recognized each other during the sex or something like that... XD But I like it! ^^ The whole idea about the club is great. :3

jiriayawhitney May 7 2011, 04:02:40 UTC

...
*excuse me while my face stops hurting*
That would be hilarious! OMG, that's horrible, but hilarious. Like, Gokudera's pounding and Tsuna's gasping, recognizes him, and climaxes yelling his name and Gokudera's too shocked to move and, ptthft, he's afraid for Juudaime. Lolz.

rune_world May 4 2011, 15:12:09 UTC

I almost panic when I though Tsuna-kun had H with someone not Gokudera but relieved after. Wao that was unexpected! *smirk* Thanks for the hotness! XD

jiriayawhitney May 7 2011, 04:01:00 UTC

That was the whole point of it, however. To scare someone and give Tsuna a real reason for a nosebleed. Why is it only Gokudera's ever given one, ne? He's an animanga teenage boy--he can't be innocent! It doesn't work that way!

gokulex59 June 18 2011, 21:40:01 UTC

Sorry, disliked it. It would be better if Jyuudaime were bi. I'll tell you why, it felt like he is at start, or else why would an yaoi author talk about bisexuals too. If I haven't gotten an idea like this, it wouldn't disappoint me, I know that ( ... )

jiriayawhitney June 19 2011, 04:26:49 UTC

Honestly, I'm really glad you disliked it, mainly because I dislike it for the same reasons you have given me. Ifi could redo it, I would do it in a heartbeat. It would be much longer and it would explain things better and not be so rushed. (I don't know how I feel about the silent-tears-of-joy part though; should I be happy?) and the Yamamoto thing was just so that he wouldn't be left out, though it's always just been like wtf to me. Honestly, I'm sorry this reply is so short but I thank you for taking the time to reply to the story, especially with one that long. :3 it was my first attempt at a one-shot, which obviously I'm not very good at (so established by the 25-some chapter long fix that was only supposed to be 3 to 6 chapters--that worked out wonderfully).

gokulex59 June 19 2011, 10:55:28 UTC

I can't find the words to tell how I'm relaxed now 8D Especially that "...I dislike it for the same reasons you have given me." xD Cuz that sentence made me think of we really are alike about at least one point and I love finding people who thinks the same as me ^^ I didn't meant to write that long, the words have... just suddenly come out :D ( ... )