Comments | jncar: Fic: Witness Protection, part 8/12 (?)

jncar

Fic: Witness Protection, part 8/12 (?)

Mar 23, 2012 08:40

Title: Witness Protection, part 8/12(?)
Fandom: Parks and Recreation
Characters/Ships: Ben/Leslie, Chris/Ann, Andy/April, Ben/Pawnee, ensemble
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: ~8,800
Summary: When corporate whistleblowers Ben Adams and Chris Robinson barely escape an attempt on their lives, they gladly accept the protection of the Federal Witness ( Read more... )

witness protection, parks and rec, fic

Comments 18

sullen_aquarian March 23 2012, 15:31:34 UTC

Goddamnit, Chris. I mean I know he has his reasons but getting Andy to lie about Tonya? I am not the least bit pleased with him.

But ooh, the ending! Is she gonna confront Ben about what she learned?

jncar March 24 2012, 16:55:10 UTC

Chris has his reason--which will be revealed. But they're still not very good reasons.

Thanks for reading :-)

spunkyar March 23 2012, 16:15:00 UTC

Ok first...I totally squelled when I saw this on my flist. But you are trying to kill me with this story. Poor Leslie. She was so understanding in the bar and then to be kicked in the gut the next day by Andy was just so sad to read. And it's all Chris's fault! How dare he hurt Leslie and Ben like that. Who is he to keep them apart. He is in a relationship with Ann and what about her poor feelings. He is just using her basically. I can't wait for Ben to find out what he's doing and kick his ass. Also I do feel bad for Ben, but he needs to man up and let Leslie choose for herself. Can't he see he's just hurting her more by not being honest with him. And now with her knowing his name isn't even real, I can't wait to see what happens next.

You are doing a great job with this story. Please update soon!! :)

jncar March 24 2012, 16:57:23 UTC

Yeah, in a way Chris is handling the stresses of their situation even worse than poor panic-attack-Ben, but he isn't looking inside himself to realize it, hence becoming a big jerk.

It's fun that I've got you so invested in this. Yay!

Thanks for reading :-)

princess_george March 23 2012, 16:24:41 UTC

Ooh, you've thickened the plot nicely! It's very plot-driven, this one, and I'm enjoying it. I'm sure you have diagrams about how it all works, right? Twist, twist, turn. Complications piled on top of complications... Anyhow, looking forward to the next one!

jncar March 24 2012, 16:58:36 UTC

I do love writing plot-heavy stories. And, yes, I do outline my multi-chapter fics. I don't know how I'd keep track, otherwise.

Thanks for reading :-)

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americnxidiot March 24 2012, 11:44:50 UTC

SAME. This is my immediate reaction lolll.

jncar March 24 2012, 17:00:24 UTC

Yes--I'm letting these circumstances bring out the worst in Chris, and it's kind of fun.

Thanks for reading :-)

jncar March 24 2012, 16:59:32 UTC

;-)

I'll explore Chris motives more deeply in future chapters. But yes, right now hate him all you want.

Thanks for reading

rikyl March 23 2012, 20:29:48 UTC

Love this chapter! It's great how you're including so many canon references but putting your own twist on them. Very interesting that Chris is doing more to purposefully block Ben and Leslie here. And now Leslie has figured out that Ben isn't who he says he is! I'm on the edge of my seat to find out what she does with that info.

jncar March 24 2012, 17:01:25 UTC

Thanks! I'm having tons of fun playing with the characters and weaving canon references into my own plot.

Thanks for reading :-)