Comments | joe15hcstyle: Giving up...fuck no.

joe15hcstyle

Giving up...fuck no.

Jan 25, 2005 20:51

A vacant guise,
As thin as lies,
Your pain eats through me.

I’ll give you time,
While I dance and rhyme,
But it’s killing me, truthfully.

My helping hand,
Falls dead and bland,
I’m just trying to reach you.

Days crumble away,
Night becomes day,
Never leaving, I’ll remain true.

Your empty smile,
Graceless style,
There must be ( Read more... )

Comments 4

OMG JOE babyburton January 25 2005, 18:45:39 UTC

Joe-

that is the sweetest thing in the whole world. You make me feel sooo amazing because you are truly amazing and i LOVE YOU

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thru_beingcool January 26 2005, 16:22:59 UTC

Hate to ruin the mood stalker, but it sounded way too forced. Let it flow, don't worry about rhyme so much, and just let what you really want to say out without having to worry about the constrictions of rhythm and rhyme. Just the opinion of another songwriter. Keep it up, stalker.

babyburton January 26 2005, 17:23:05 UTC

its the thought that counts

listen to the words and not the whole "format"

anonymous January 26 2005, 19:32:56 UTC

you're talented.