The beginning of God knows what.

[johnstarrr]

I want to do an experiment. I wrote a story a long time ago I just recently unearthed. I read it again and decided I liked it, but it needed a lot of work and polish before I could present it in any way I'd be proud of. I had almost forgotten about it again until Amber reminded me that we had joked about me typing it up. I've since decided that I'm

Comments

[anonymous]

seems a little ridiculous. what are you trying to say?
-kiran

[johnstarrr]

I agree, its crazy ridiculous. Hopefully after I refine it, it'll be better. I also have no idea what I was trying say back then, but it was probably something along the lines of "words hurt." I probably felt ignored one day at lunch and wrote this, I dunno.

Who said endings had to be happy?

[anonymous]

JS -
Very morbid. Very depressing. But lots of potential. I see it as an ending that screams for a flashback and some explanatory background. It all hints at a series of (possibly intertwined) events in both of their lives that lead up to that one moment - the moment that finally breaks the damn and lets in a world of hurt. I, for one, vote that you keep going with it...

-dan

Re: Who said endings had to be happy?

[johnstarrr]

Thanks, I think a little bit of character development will do this story a world of good. As for the series, well, I'll get to that later. ;)

Re: Who said endings had to be happy?

[tell_no_one]

Yea, I agree with the character development thing. When I read it, it seemed silly that they killed themselves because it seemed arbitrary. If you can flesh out the background it would prolly make it a damn shakepearean tragedy. BUT, I wanted to see the romantic comedy you wrote! Post that next.