hmm lets give this a try

[josefine]

Around the world the sky is dark

Comments

[misschickie]

Very prettily done. Hmmm will have to check if prettily is a word.

(clears throat and tries out snobby sounding voice for a more appropriate critique)

This critic is fascinated by the seemingly endless night the author is able to display. While some would think the poem riddled with emptiness it is quite apparent the amount of love put into the world will redeem the darkened skies to their radiant blue splendor.

now seriously S.E.Vannoy... :) It's very pretty and if you just decided to sit down and write that one night then you're a very talented person. *hug*

[josefine]

Yeah well if you say so, I just felt like writing and so I did. It isn't something I put a lot of stress or anything into. Oh and I have one wrong word and some punctuation and capitalization errors

[josefine]

there all edited now I think. lemme know if there is any more.