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joshdonnalyman

Fic: An Enduring Fate (1/?)

Mar 06, 2011 22:51

Title: An Enduring Fate (1/?)
Rating: PG-13
Pairings/Characters: Will/Rachel
Spoilers: Through A Very Glee Christmas
Disclaimer: All things Glee belong to Ryan Murphy and Fox. I’m just borrowing them.
Summary: Life is a series of starts and stops.
A/N: My first multi-chapter Glee story. Please let me know what you think and if it is worth continuing ( Read more... )

rating: pg-13, title: an enduring fate, pairing: will/rachel, fic: glee

Comments 10

madmenfanatic March 7 2011, 06:14:49 UTC

more, more, more!!!

joshdonnalyman March 8 2011, 17:59:27 UTC

I'm glad you liked it. I should have the next chapter posted around this weekend. :)

wistfulwatcher March 7 2011, 07:07:42 UTC

That was simply gorgeous. Truly, I think I have a new favorite from you (which, let me tell you, is a tough change)! I absolutely hope you choose to continue this--you've set up so nicely for more chapters and character development.

And let's talk about the character work. There are so many passages that I'd quote at you, but I'll narrow it down, some.

“No, it’s not,” he insisted, “I never should have yelled at you like that and especially not in front of the group. I know you have been having a hard time lately.”

“It’s okay. I was being difficult. I realize that,” she replied, focusing on an ornament in front of her.Your dialogue is always fantastic (and in character), but I especially loved this section. Will and Rachel always lash out in a big, misguided way, but you can also tell how quickly they regret it, as well as the knowledge that they are, overall, reasonable people. This bit of the conversation just seems like the perfect follow-up to that scene. As well as the fact that Will had to take the first step to apologize ( ... )

joshdonnalyman March 8 2011, 18:11:19 UTC

Wow. Thank you so much for this review. It means so much to me that you like this story so far. I was very nervous about it.

This bit of the conversation just seems like the perfect follow-up to that scene. As well as the fact that Will had to take the first step to apologize.

Thank you. I felt like the blow up they had needed to be addressed and I wish it had been on the show. Everything between them seemed totally okay by the next episode, with Rachel even inviting him to her house for Christmas Eve. They had to have discussed it and I wish would could have seen it. They have had so few scenes together this season and it so disappointing.

PERFECT. Seriously, this is EXACTLY what I've been waiting to see, both on TV (ACTUAL Rachel development on the show, rather than Rachel Relationship development? Never.) and in fanfic. In fact, I'm working on a Rachel essay, in which I reference almost exactly this. You phrased it beautifully, and it was a very realistic, in character truth to serve as a catalyst of sharing between Will and ( ... )

weird_fin March 7 2011, 14:01:04 UTC

Lovely, please continue with it if you can. :)

joshdonnalyman March 8 2011, 18:11:50 UTC

Thank you so much. I should have the next chapter up in a few days :)

chloe_2450 March 7 2011, 18:15:40 UTC

can't wait to see where this goes :D

joshdonnalyman March 8 2011, 18:12:10 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you like it.

meagan4dominic March 8 2011, 02:41:33 UTC

“But it’s hard. One day she tells me that she doesn’t want to be my mother and a couple weeks later she’s adopting Quinn’s daughter. I mean, I don’t understand why she doesn’t want me. Why I’m not good enough.” Rachel had done her best keeping everything together until this point but now the tears were falling. She hadn’t been able to talk to anyone about her mother. She felt guilty saying anything to her fathers. As much as she loved them both, the thought of having a mother too had made her happy and she didn’t want them to feel like they didn’t do enough - I love this whole paragraph, Rachel has been placed in a really difficult position and for a teenage girl this is a lot to deal with, I'm really glad that you addressed this. It was a happy ending for Shelby adopting Beth but I can't imagine how rejected this left Rachel feeling

“Rachel, you know you can always come to me if you need to talk. I’ll always be here for you.” - I really like how you've given Rachel an ally in Mr Schue, she needs someone on her side ( ... )

joshdonnalyman March 8 2011, 18:16:16 UTC

Thank you for the lovely review!

I was actually happy too about Shelby getting a second chance to be a mom with Beth. But I hated how everything played out with Rachel. I can't imagine she's not troubled by the turn of events. In other words, I'm glad you liked this part and the story as a whole. :)

I should have the next chapter up this weekend!

Also side note: I adore your icon. I love LOST and and Claire and Charlie were just fantastic together.