Fic: An Enduring Fate (4/?)

[joshdonnalyman]

Title: An Enduring Fate (4/?)
Rating: NC-17 (Please note the change)
Pairings/Characters: Will/Rachel
Spoilers: Follows canon through A Very Glee Christmas; uses ideas from rest of season 2
Disclaimer: All things Glee belong to Ryan Murphy and Fox. I’m just borrowing them.
Summary: They say life is a series of starts and stops, for Will and Rachel that

Comments

[wistfulwatcher]

BEST COMING HOME FROM WORK PRESENT. I went to bed super early last night (I know, so lame) and what did I miss? Um, just an awesome opportunity to read this and leave me with sweet Will/Rachel rumblings in my head. Le sigh.

I loved this, as always. This chapter was fantastic, and the bumped up rating note got me even more excited to read! OK, enough. A real review now:

I'm really happy to see you include BIOTA--I really loved that ep for them, and I think it was nice to see how upset Will got by her irresponsible behavior, at the same time that he was very sweet and understanding and protective. All of which are my favorite Wills (no, shut up, that's totally legit).

“Rach, you could have gotten hurt. Alcohol is new to you. You may not know what your body can handle yet.”

“I said I was sorry. And it’s not like you don’t drink.”I will forever be envious of your dialogue. I could see and hear all of this from these lines--Will's slightly condescending tone and the subtle anger Rachel feels at it, the need for her little jibe at him

[joshdonnalyman]

Thank you so much!

I think it was nice to see how upset Will got by her irresponsible behavior, at the same time that he was very sweet and understanding and protective. All of which are my favorite Wills (no, shut up, that's totally legit).

Haha, I will not argue with you. I have so many favorite Wills it's ridiculous. I'm glad too that you got this from the scene. I wanted to have Will walking that line between needing to be the authority figure but at the same time just being concerned about his girlfriend.

I much prefer this fanon version of events to canon...new head!canon successfully applied.

I prefer this too!

This sounds like foreshadowing and now I'm nervous and sad...

I suppose it has to has to happen some time. I really wanted to take my time developing their relationship and really allow them to fall in love and let the reader see that. But things can't always be perfect, right?

The OS tie in was perfect--I am so glad they lost because of the altered universe. It's a detail like this that really sells me on a

[wistfulwatcher]

I suppose it has to has to happen some time. I really wanted to take my time developing their relationship and really allow them to fall in love and let the reader see that.

I think your pacing so far is perfect--especially with your shorter passages over a longer period of time, I can really feel this relationship growing and rounding out. I'm sure your pacing with issues will be good and natural, too.

In fact, I'm halfway done with the next chapter!

YESSSSSSS! Oh my God, this makes me so happy! AND a cliche_30 fic? Ah, please, please!