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joshdonnalyman

Fic: Before the Present to the Past is Lost

Feb 13, 2012 01:14

Title: Before the Present to the Past is Lost
Rating: NC-17
Pairings/Characters: Will/Rachel
Word Count: 3,116
Spoilers: Follows canon through The Spanish Teacher, uses speculation/potential spoilers for upcoming episodes. Also, I've not yet seen anything after the Christmas episode, so I'm basing some of the things in this on what I've read.
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rating: nc-17, challenge: porn battle, pairing: will/rachel, fic: glee

Comments 4

lookathereyes February 17 2012, 19:30:51 UTC

I'm just a random commenter as I followed the link through from will_rachel

I liked it. Wish she stayed the night! Can totally imagine Rachel being dependent on Will, having doubts about Finn... basically everything you've captured here. Well done, hope you can continue it/write more Will/Rachel! :)

wistfulwatcher February 25 2012, 11:12:07 UTC

HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOTTT! I mean, excellent fic, I enjoyed it immensely. In all seriousness, this was phenomenal; a perfect depiction of the bittersweetness they could have in the future from where we are right now in the show. I love the quiet romanticism of this piece, and yet the very deep, very constant ache it presents in the knowledge that this isn't going to change anything between them, but that doesn't make this any less meaningful between them.

While I hate the idea of Finchel, namely their marriage, I do think it would create a Rachel like this, that is so torn, that is so lacking in the confidence she used to have, and that can resign herself to one night of connection to love without any expectations.

The sex, as always, was steamy and sexy and so sadly beautiful. I really connected and empathized with Rachel more than I feel like I usually do.

I think you did an especially amazing job tackling the issues surrounding the marriage, and the lack of interaction from Will.

He has a special relationship with Finn, one that ( ... )

wistfulwatcher February 25 2012, 11:12:54 UTC

(My goal is to someday make it under the 4300 character limit...)

“I’m still your biggest fan. That’s never going to change,” he whispers. His head is moving closer to hers.

*ugly crying* I JUST SHIP THEM SO MU-UH-UCH!

“Perfect. I feel like I belong here with you. Like this is meant to be.” She looks him in the eye and can see him start to second-guess this again.

“Rache-”

“I know,” she says quickly. “I know that this might not become anything and that it is about tonight and everything going on and I appreciate that, but I also know that this is about feelings. I know you still love me and I still love you. And this above everything is about love.” This is such a beautiful bit of dialouge. In case you haven't gathered, I really love your dialogue. I love her assessment that this is about feelings--not discounting it, or saying it's just sex for connection or anything that is such a mainstay of fic. But the opposite, that this is all about feelings and love and that's all she needs, one night of it, to get through her divorce. I ( ... )

medelle March 2 2012, 05:47:03 UTC

Christ on a pogo stick this was hot!!

Seriously, I loved this. So well done! And OMG yes, I want more! Like now! (wistfulwatcher will tell you I'm an extremely demanding reader. LOL)

OK... on a more mellow, non stalkerish, fangirl note...

You write really well. Your dialogue is spot on, and the dynamic btwn them is tangible. I could actually picture them on his couch while they were speaking.

Very nice!