Supernatural fic - 4.16 interlude

[joyeee]

Title: As cold waters to a thirsty soul
Characters: Sam, Castiel, Dean (sort of), Anna, Ruby
Rating: R for profanity
Word Count: ~3300
Spoilers: through 4.16
Summary: "missing scenes" for episode 4.16: "On the Head of a Pin" ~ Sam, Castiel, and their thoughts as they wait for Dean to wake up - including Dean and God, what to do next, whom they can

Comments

[darksilvercat]

This was AWESOME. You got into their heads so well, and I really really loved that little moment of Castiel pouring some water for Dean so it would be ready for him when he woke. That's a wonderful touch. Also nice handling of Ruby's not-so-subtle efforts at stringing Sam along, and Anna. Who I still don't like, but loved the way you dealt with her here.

[joyeee]

We think alike about Anna! XD I LOVED 4.16, you know that, but I just had to add something for myself to reconcile how he asked her for help, that little hand-touch of hers, etc. etc. *___*

But! Enough about that, let's get to Dean and Castiel! :D It seems the water-pouring thing had exactly the sort of effect I wanted, so, YAY! ♥♥♥ So glad you liked it ^_________^

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! Also, thank you bunches <33333 for writing up your con experience ~ the t-shirts and Hawaii and all of them bantering back-and-forth, TOO MUCH AWESOMENESS!!! :D :D :D

[nightswhisper]

That was wonderfully done! Great reflections! I greatly enjoyed it!

[joyeee]

I'm very glad you liked it, thanks so much for taking the time to comment! :D

[just_ruth]

Excellent! Excellent! I was glad I was able to help.

[joyeee]

Oh! Thank you all over again your help! ♥♥♥ And, 3300+ words isn't exactly short, I know, so thanks bunches also for letting commenting on this final version! I'm glad you liked it! :D

[chemm80]

Nice look at what's going on inside their minds. I'm not as big a fan of Castiel as most I know, but I this really makes me like him more--probably the best inner monologue I've read for him.

[joyeee]

If you like Castiel more because of anything I did, I'm as pleased as Dean with pie! :D :D :D Also, characterization is my number-one concern - even more so here since it's my first "serious" spn fic. Thank you very much for your lovely comment!

[eggblue]

Wow, this was great! You really have thought about this episode. I'm sorry it took me so long to get here

[joyeee]

For me there's no such thing as late feedback, esp when it's as thoughtful and thorough as this! <33333

Yes Dean and Sam have changed so much! T__T I was just seeing some clips back from Season 1, and sometimes Dean says exactly the sort of thing Sam would say now, and vice versa!

Pie seems to be a sensitive button in this fandom :) Of course it's a staple for lighter fics... but to my mind that makes it all the stronger as an angst button!

Castiel not understanding Anna...haha, I'm not sure I understand Anna. But I tried hard to at least be fair, based on her dialogue etc. in the show so far, and if the writers do make her a "good" character, i.e. one Castiel (and the boys)... "should" listen to (???) then at least I think this fic doesn't contradict that.

More importantly, let's get to the guys! (and their angst!) ^___^ I'm so, so glad that despite being unconscious throughout this fic, Dean still comes across as a key character, needed, very much a factor in Sam and Castiel's thoughts and actions. That was exactly what I was

[eggblue]

Yes, you didn't contradict any of the established characterizations at all. Using pie as an angst button is brilliant! With the water-pouring moment, it just said so much about Cas, how he has to work at being thoughtful from a human perspective (and he wants to) and how proud he is at the thought that he might be able to help Dean. Aw! Awesome.