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Address on File, Part Five

Aug 15, 2010 07:27

Title: Address on File, Part Five
Prompt: #4, target
Author: JRosemary
Rating: PG
Characters: Neal
Word count: 300
Warnings/Spoilers: None
Summary: Neal circles the date of Peter's homecoming . . .
Notes: Written for White Collar 100 Community; part of my My Old Man verse, which explores the father-son aspect of the relationship between Peter and ( Read more... )

white collar, fan fiction, white collar 100

Comments 12

ladygray99 August 15 2010, 15:44:43 UTC

This just keeps getting better and better. You're really saying a lot in just 300 words tracking the path of Neal's relationships with Peter. Wonderful. Keep going.

jrosemary August 15 2010, 17:43:48 UTC

Thanks Lady Gray! I'm trying to figure out a way to use 'case' right now . . .

sg_lab August 15 2010, 16:10:18 UTC

Another really sweet piece to this series.

jrosemary August 15 2010, 17:42:40 UTC

Thanks so much, sg_lab!

klairi August 16 2010, 03:11:33 UTC

I'm just loving these. I can only imagine what it will be like when Peter finally does get home. We took a vacation just the two of us when our son was three. We left him at home with his grandmother. Talked to him on the phone and everything seemed fine. Until we got home. He followed me from room to room, never letting me out of his sight for weeks! Poor little guy.

jrosemary August 17 2010, 01:05:38 UTC

Aw! Thanks, Klairi!

Now I want to have Neal following Peter from room to room, lol. (He might just come close--he's not going to want to let Peter out of his sight!)

klairi August 17 2010, 02:11:21 UTC

Well, I think in an interview Matt Bomer did say Neal was like a pre-schooler, so there is presence....

ficwriterjet August 16 2010, 04:58:23 UTC

Aww, I'm positive Neal would miss Peter if he was injured and had to be away from him. Nice job of showing that.

jrosemary August 17 2010, 01:11:54 UTC

Thanks Jet!

shelley6441 August 17 2010, 01:22:32 UTC

Since I am a fan of Peter/Neal, I'm reading your chapters through slashy colored glasses. Neal is more fond of Peter than any man would be for his father. Yet I think the combination of Neal needing Peter's guidance as a son would from his dad, and Neal's love for Peter in a subtle, romantic fashion, is what makes this such compelling storytelling for me.

I'm looking forward to Peter coming home, also.

Thank you!

jrosemary August 17 2010, 01:38:51 UTC

Thanks so much Shelley!

Honestly, I agree that the romantic element between Peter and Neal is there, even in this verse--but I think it's the road not taken for them.

The way the stars aligned in this verse, they accidentally ended up focusing on the father-son aspects of their relationship, and that kind of forces them not to focus on any potential romance, if that makes sense. (?)

shelley6441 August 17 2010, 02:04:12 UTC

Absolutely. It's the father-son aspect that hooked me.

Thanks, again!