wrap up

[jthesoccerman03]

Well here is the finished product, the result of all this talk about sex. i put a decent amount of time into this and i figure it might help some people see what theyre getting into. if not, disregard the whole thing, its only a paper for school anyways

Comments

[soccerplaya47]

Cliffnotes??

[soccerplaya47]

"Gradually, the media and popular thought eroded this

[jthesoccerman03]

theyre still sentences. i think

A state where females are considered by males as a sexual objects and trophies, rather than equal partners in a relationship. <-- sentence

i probably could have done it with semicolons but why. periods work good and are less flashy. periods also enhance the dramatic effect (thats the smart part of me coming out) more than semicolons would.

but indeed, thanks for reading some of it :-)

[soccerplaya47]

Looking at that sentence I see a subject (A State) and then adjectives describing it, and then a little clause.. butn nothing actually happening to the subject.

I'm probably wrong.. but whatever.. tell me if Mrs. Barnette actually says anything about it when you turn it in. I'm curious now, heh.

[spunk33]

Justin, I managed to read all of it, it interested me. I liked how you wrote, I just wish you could write for me on the writing test come Tuesday.

"People that flaunt the fact that they are having sex
and constantly share their exploits with friends are not prepared for it."

shouldn't there be "that" between "friends are"
Maybe that's me, but the sentence was sort of unclear.

Either way, you're an excellent writer in my opinion and I hope you get a good grade on the report.

[jthesoccerman03]

thanks, hopefully i will. my writing is whats keeping my grade up in there. that woman is psychotic, all she does is ramble on about useless shit. i want someone to say "quit babbling bitch" and slap her. but usually im sleeping. so... maybe ill dream about it someday.

[soccerplaya47]

You mean you don't fall asleep in their everyday? you actually try and make sense of what she says!??

Dude, I swear to god.. anyone that walked by our AP 11 class last year saw 8-11 sleeping..with like 2 people actually paying attention. No exagerration.

I learned absolutely nothing in that class.. except.. well.. yeah, nevermind.. nothing.

[jthesoccerman03]

seriously! i dont think she teaches anything new each year, just makes up new bullshit to talk about. she probably goes to this mailing list that sends her useless junk to talk about so she can waste classtime. i wouldnt be surprised if she starts talking about aliens or swiss cheese tomorrow.

[breaky0urheart]

I like sex
and Im not going to read your paper

the end.

[jthesoccerman03]

sex is fun but there should be more

geeez ashley ... ur the reason people have to write books about sex