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[jtiberiuskirk]

For a prompt at the buckleup kirk/mccoy meme.
Author: jtiberiuskirk
Fandom: Star Trek XI
Pairing: Kirk/McCoy
Summary; A life threatening accident forces James Kirk to let go of a secret he’s been keeping for a long time. And then, he has to deal with it.
Word count: 2436
Genre: PG (this part).
Excerpt: The picture his CMO makes against the smoke and metal mess is

Comments

[rogueangel1998]

Uh, porn is always a good reason - for anything, let alone a sequel!

the boys needs some closure, right? It would be cruel to not give it to them. ;-)

RA

[jtiberiuskirk]

Firstly, thank you for the comment!
Secondly, I'm wondering about editing this to include a kiss at the end -because according to my friend, she won't beta it for me until I do. Do you think it needs it? If so, I'll write it :P

The boys definitely need some closure :)
-J.

[rogueangel1998]

No offense to your friend, but I don't think this part needs a kiss if you are writing another part/sequel.

Sometimes there is too much of a good thing? Don't get me wrong, I love the "I love you!" kisses, but IMO they way you set them up, this scene doesn't need to end with one. Jim's still unsure of himself and Bones is exasperated with him (which is a good reason to kiss him, I admit), but ending it here feels right to me.

Now in the next part you could definitely start with the kiss - it would set the tone that Bones is finally getting down to business and calling Jim on his asshatery of taking his time to figure it out. I imagine Jim would still be, "Huh? What? Really? Are you sure?" because as much confidence as Jim exudes in his Captain-y life, in his personal life he's really insecure.

Hope that helps and isn't too much!

RA

[jtiberiuskirk]

That was definitely not too much! It was exactly what I needed to hear :) I thought the ending here felt right too, and so that's why I left it.
The next part I intend to start in Leo's POV, and build up to everything :)
I love how you get Jim, too. I'm just reading one of your fics now and I am thoroughly (in a sniffle -get me a tissue way) enjoying it ^^ It's always lovely to see well written fics from Jim's POV.
Thank you so much for your help!
-J.

[rogueangel1998]

You are welcome.

I'm guessing you're reading Lost Property?

Beta readers are wonderful people. I couldn't write without mine, but there is a fine line to traverse when you have differences of opinion, isn't there? It comes down to the fact that it is your story and you have to do what you feel is right - no matter what anyone else says. I do try to compromise and take her suggestions on some (most) of her ideas, but on certain things I stick to my guns and she's okay with that. We both want to put out a good story. She'll even beta my slashier stories - which she hates! LOL What a good beta.

Good luck!

RA

[jtiberiuskirk]

I am, at that :D
I've heard Beta's are awesome (I am, after all, one myself ;)) and yup, it's always tricky walking along that line, but the result you end up with at the end is, in my opinion, worth it. It sounds like you have an awesome Beta. I'm glad! I look forward to reading more of your works :)
Thank you, for everything!
-J.

[laeliacatt]

Wow! I enjoyed this so much. I love the way you conveyed the turmoil Jim (well, both of them, really) is going through, as well as his insecurity. Beautifully done!

I agree with the previous poster that this part doesn't need a kiss to tie up the thread, especially since you have a sequel in mind. The ending is just right.

I look forward to seeing Bones' POV. I can't wait to read it. :)

[jtiberiuskirk]

Ahh! This was a seriously lovely message to get. Really pulled me out of my 'omfg I hate university, why do I even exist,' slump. Thank you, so much. I'm really glad you like it, and I look forward to writing Bones' POV (I'll probably have it up within the week, if my course doesn't drown me).
Thank you for your comment, and thank you for agreeing with RA ^^ I'm glad to know my gut isn't wrong!
I love your DP, by the way ;)
-J.

[fairyniamh]

Sequel... yes please. There are some loose ends that could be closed up... and I am aching for a happy ending.

Now, please do not get me wrong. I do like this story and the intense feelings through out... I am just the type of girl that likes for there to be no loose ends.

However either way you go... Thank you for sharing this jewel with us.

[jtiberiuskirk]

Thank you so much for this comment! I'm definitely planning a sequel. I've written part of it already and I'm still worried about it, but it'll definitely be here soon providing I can get my butt into gear and write it.
As for the happy ending /winks. You'll have to stay tuned :P I don't like for there to be too many loose ends either, so hopefully I can stitch them up for you.
Thank you once again, very much.
-J.

[sickbay23]

Great Story and yes sequel would be great, like to read about Bones point of view.

[jtiberiuskirk]

I'm so very glad you like it. Leo's view is coming up asap. Just fine tuning now, and writing the rest (of course).
Thank you for taking the time to comment :)
Much love,
-J.