"You know, I never thanked you."

[judexseven]

I am really proud of this fic. :)

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Title: "Don't Be Afraid To Be Free"
Pairing/Character: Chuck/Sarah
Rating: R...?
Summary: A dark night, a dangerous escape, and a quiet hotel room.
Disclaimer: Unfortunately, I don't own them, or else this would be next week's episode, heh.
Notes: For broken__records, my Muse, who I know has been waiting for me to write

Comments

[broken__records]

I have been waiting forever for you to write them. And you did not disappoint. This is wonderful. I love that amidst all the danger and running, they get to have this quiet moment for themselves.

[judexseven]

With the ending of this week's episode and that little glimpse into next week, it made it so easy to believe that they will have a quiet little moment before it all goes to hell.

I'm so glad you liked. You know you're the one person I count on for these! ♥

[lauraceleste]

*squee*

I love this :) I've been waiting for them to go on the lam. It's the only time they can be free.

[judexseven]

Thanks so much!!

[iloveyoursoul]

First of all, I want to compliment you on succeeding in writing a fic incluidng sexual content but without ever making it cringe-y or unpleasant in any way. It was just fitting, well-written and even hot.

Some of my favourite parts included:
He'd never tell her, but he was so in love with her, he saw everything in her eyes. He saw a wedding that would never happen, children that would never be born, a home they'd never have.
So true, so sad and so Chuck... even as a fangirl, those realities that go through Chuck's mind there, they're real. They are, despite the other consequences of having the Intersect in his head, perhaps Chuck's biggest pathos.
And when he kissed her and pushed deep inside her, he wondered how he'd gotten lucky enough that a girl like her would fall in love with a guy like him.
It's a big cliche risk to include something that basically means "he never understood how SHE could fall in love with HIM" but it just works here, in all its simplicity.
There was the faintest sign of a burn from his stubble around her lips

[judexseven]

I have to say, there are days when I look at my writing and think, "I'm not ever going to be good enough." But comments like this - especially from virtual strangers - make me smile and feel like I might actually have some semblance of talent. Thank you so much for taking time to actually review this - it means more to me than you can know.

Now, off the saptastic stuff, heh. I absolutely believe that Chuck sees in Sarah a future he can't have, and that whole inner-monologue-esque paragraph just came to me and seemed so him I had to include it. Especially in a moment like that, Chuck would be so much more in love with her than he ever expected, I wouldn't be surprised if he paused to think about it

[iloveyoursoul]

First (again) I just want to say that when I read through your fanfic, I thought that some times, I think my writing is actually 'alright' (i usually believe i'm never going to be good enough, just like you) but in rare occasions I'll think it's tolerable, but then I read this fic of yours, so simple and so eloquent at the same time, and it just made me think of how I'm never going to be what I want to. Funny how coincidental minds can be, isn't it, heh

[judexseven]

♥ I've decided to give a part two a chance - on my other computer, not connected to the internet this way I'm not tempted to post a half-assed story. If it works, it works. If not, no harm, no foul. Still a good exercise!

And I got a thing for Zach all-time, almost all-looks, TEEHEE. He's just... almost the perfect guy. I can't help it, I've always fallen for the half-handsome clowns in the group, the half-geeks. And he can SING too. Oh dear.

AMEN. To just everything you said there. :)

[skyetropics]

Wow, you wrote this beautifully. Passionately even! The sex was not overly gratuitous, which was nice but it still packed that little heat we wanted. Excellent job. Lets just hope that our Charah actually gets to show some sort of emotion in the heat of their passion tomorrow. My favorite lines are:

As he tossed the bra to the side, his eyes raked over her, and he smiled gently. "You're beautiful," he whispered. "I know you said no talking, but you are, Sarah."

She arched up, kissing his jaw. "So are you," she replied quietly.

...OMG, can you say sweet!!!??

[judexseven]

Icon twin! Heh, I'm such a nerd.

Anyway. I've written smut before and I've never been overtly comfortable with it, so I decided to keep it to a minimum while still giving us the Chuck/Sarah passion we all wanted. So I'm glad you liked that!

And I can just imagine Sarah wanting the moment to be silent, so she can't say something she'll regret in the end, but you know Chuck would whisper something just right and she'd have to respond. So. (Also, I can't honestly say I wasn't self-projecting onto her, LOL.)

Thanks so much!! ♥

[mikki13]

This was awesome. I could really see it unfold; the characters were very much in character and the writing was beautiful. Below are my favorite parts:

She fit against him perfectly, her soft curves matching his long, lean angles as if they were intended to.

I love it when it's hinted that they're destined to be, but when the author doesn't come right out and say so. This was very eloquently written.

Oh, God, Chuck thought. This is Sarah. My Sarah.

Another thing I love is when he calls her "My Sarah." The problem is, so many people have used this line (in both Chuck fic and other fandoms) that it's gotten stale. Here, you use it wonderfully. It seems to fit naturally into the progression of the moment, and into Chuck's thoughts as a whole. Great work.

There was the faintest sign of a burn from his stubble around her lips, and a light, multi-colored bruise flawed the pale skin on her neck, just beneath her right ear.And yet another moment that I loved. You've really brought the repercussions of the night back to life. We