Comments | juniperjune: rewritten poems 2 & 3

juniperjune

rewritten poems 2 & 3

Apr 02, 2009 15:48

Guys, I thought that last poem was pretty good -- but you have somehow failed to shower me with praise. These two I like less, but maybe you will like them more. I wrote them this morning in the library, killing time before class. I deliberately set out to find some poets I don't have in my own collection, and I ended up using two poems from The ( Read more... )

my writing, napowrimo

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faerieboots April 3 2009, 02:59:07 UTC

I had similar experiences when I tried this exercise. It is a very neat exercise, thank you for posting it here!

On a related note, I really like "fantastic in their taciturn glitter."

Also, I would find it edifying to see the original works these are based out of; are they easily available publicly?

_swallow April 3 2009, 16:39:26 UTC

I like the melon flesh images!

I have been really skeptical of found/process poems lately. They don't seem ~*sincere*~ enough to satisfy me, for some reason. This maybe be related to the fact that I have started writing poems again (!) after years of not, and I am writing poems that are about my life, not fictional or abstract, for the first time (!). Like I've finally gotten to the point where I have enough genuine insight/experience in my own life to want to put it into art. so any art that doesn't come out of that same genuine place, I'm like, what?? we figured out we don't need you any more!!

say no to drugs? _swallow April 8 2009, 03:38:41 UTC

Hey, this comment I left kept floating back to my head over the past few days, and I just reread it and whoa, it sounds so bratty. I am sorry. I was very high on caffeine when I wrote it and was barely concentrating enough to find my punctuation on the keyboard, so I think the sense of self-congratulation I was feeling about using commas and periods was spilling over into everything I said. Which is an explanation, not an excuse. Anyway, I apologize and would take it back if I could, and I dig the melon poem even more after having read it in an unaltered state.

Re: say no to drugs? juniperjune April 9 2009, 05:22:08 UTC

No problem! I meant to respond to the original comment, as I understood it to be a report of your experience & not a belittling of my work, but doing so was radically deprioritized when Real Work started needing to occur around here, which is also why the poems are on hiatus at the moment. But my original response was going to be something like ( ... )