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jupistruck

Fic: Retrospect

Mar 18, 2010 15:09

Title: Retrospect
Fandom: Dragon Age
Rating: PG
Pairing: None, Alistair/PC (eventually, if I ever get that far)
Length: approx. 700 words
Summary: Post-Ostagar, Alistair reflects.

( He sat facing out into the swamp )

Comments 6

auds1978 March 18 2010, 23:32:47 UTC

I really like it so far, hope you write some more. Though not to be a jerk, Flemeth saved them in the form of an eagle. I actually really like how he thought she was the arch demon

jupistruck March 18 2010, 23:52:51 UTC

Yeah, I was initially planning on Flemeth as a Great Bird, but decided to tweak with it a bit, for a few reasons, the first being that it worked better for the whole Archdemon angle. Also, since we do see Flemeth become a dragon later, I associate that form with her a little more closely. I figured since Morrigan was being rather glib when she tells you how Flemeth rescued you, it may as well have been a dragon as much as any flying beastie.

clafount March 19 2010, 01:06:45 UTC

Yeah I don't necessarily think we're meant to know exactly how Flemeth saved the pair. Morrigan's answer always struck me as being decidedly sarcastic.

So I like your interpretation a lot actually.

ashfae March 18 2010, 23:38:27 UTC

I like this a lot, especially the last line.

Though yes, does Alistair mistake Flemeth for the Archdemon because of injury/despair/delusion? I could see that but possibly it should be more clear that he's realized she wasn't, afterwards.

jupistruck March 19 2010, 00:00:42 UTC

Alas, the change from eagle to dragon was intentional divergence, though perhaps if I'd thought on it a little more, while fighting darkspawn and thinking your death is only seconds away and injured to where he really ought to be dead soon, any massive flying creature could probably be mistaken as a dragon.

Was initially intended to be longer, that last line leading into something else, but nothing else really seemed to tie into it properly. I'm hoping if I can expand this little storyline a bit, I can touch back on it properly.

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jupistruck March 20 2010, 01:06:07 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you felt that Alistair was in character, I wasn't quite sure how to express his rather unique personality in a more depressed way, but I'm hoping to explore him a little more in the near future.

And I can't remember the wording exactly, but before you leave the hut to speak with Flemeth and Alistair, if you ask Morrigan how you were saved, she says rather flippantly that 'Mother turned into a giant eagle and plucked you from the tower, if you don't believe that story, you should ask her yourself.' Something along those lines. =)