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[just_tonic]

So. I wrote this a long time ago, and I've just finally typed it up. It doesn't follow my current style at all, it's really flashy and showing, and kind of emo, but I think I'm going to post it, so you can tell me stuff.

So tell me stuff.

Please?

Comments

[nillion]

Ew. Also: Good.

I'm not really one for stuff like this--I prefer stories to be rooted in an objective reality, so I have a basis to guess at what isn't said--but this story is nice enough that I like it anyway.

There's a few typos:

"For a while, I tried to be lighter, tobe seen in the sun,..."
"...maybe being in th e shadows will be good when it happens...."
"...that it would be here soon, before too long, I tired, I did-but they didn’t listen...." (Maybe typo? Maybe not

[anonymous]

Hmm. Odd. The typos bugged me a bit, but mostly they were just typos, not grammatical errors or such, so it was fine. *hates it when people have incomprehensible grammar*

In a way I like it, and in a way I don't. I'm not sure what to think about it. Maybe I'll comment again later when I've had time to process it.

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~McDeuce