TAGTAG Chapter 2

[justnathan]

So I've been a bit behind on writing but I'm hoping to make it up this week. Chapter 3 really stuck for me; it introduces four new characters who I hadn't really conceived of yet. They were more of a mass in my head than an individual; the chorus for the novel, if you will. Anywho, Chapter 2. Let me know what you think. Seriously folks, any ideas

Comments

[petite_tadpole]

I am guessing you will probably flesh out the ronald character a bit later on, but if you weren't, I think you should :)

I guess I (and other people?) dont have a lot to give on the character/plot development yet because it's so early in... in a few weeks I may have more to offer.

I guess it's kind of like a movie... I just kind of assume you are going to go into more detail later on... so asking "OH MY GOD HE HAS A KNIFE, WHAT IS HE GOING TO DO WITH IT?" in the middle of a crowded theatre warrents having popcorn thrown at you.... ;)

One thing, though. This confuses me... When the cab got to the station Ronald pulled out his cell phone and hit a couple of buttons. Ronald?

And you may want to flesh out the first paragraphy a little bit, give a little more detail about the business etc...

[ranalou]

I agree with the fleshing out part, but don't over concern yourself with it unless Ronald is going to play a major roll in the book. He could just be a one-time guy, or he might be a major player. We won't know until you show us. Don't be afraid to have him interact with others too. We could learn a lot about him just by seeing him with another customer/friend/'treasure hunter' before Jonah walks in.
I think that as your characters move along through the story, they will reveal more to you than you had originally planned for them. Don't be surprised if sub-plots begin to pop up and weave themselves into the main theme. Your second draft can be about connecting the dots. This draft just needs to get the dots down on paper.

P.S. Let me know if you'd ever like to look over my manuscript. I had considered posting it, but I'm having too much fun with Redwing right now. I don't want to overcrowd my blog.

[justnathan]

I'd love to read your manuscript... in December. Too much going on right now. Ronald really sticks in my craw; his character keeps irritating the hell out of me. Chapter 3 involves Ronnie and some of his buddies (also former hunters). I never really got the idea that characters can sort of chart their own directions but I'll be damned if these guys didn't. Frankly they're pissing me off; they're sending the story in directions I wasn't expecting.