Ahh, thank you for the critique, I appreciate it! Though in this case, it was kiiiinda a hidden metaphor but still, it is a rather old word to choose, huh? Perhaps juvenile would have been a better fit.
I'll remember to keep an eye out for that next time, thanks! :D
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eeeeeeeeeeeee this is so adorable and so them and so wonderful.
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My brothers were always staring somewhere else.LOL
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Since you asked for concrit:
"Turning his own adolescent face toward his younger brother"
At 4, Dean would in no way be an adolescent.
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Ahh, thank you for the critique, I appreciate it! Though in this case, it was kiiiinda a hidden metaphor but still, it is a rather old word to choose, huh? Perhaps juvenile would have been a better fit.
I'll remember to keep an eye out for that next time, thanks! :D
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