Fic: Dirty Rascal, Neville/Draco, R

[kabeyk]

Title: Dirty Rascal
Pairing: Neville/Draco
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Words: 1,700-ish
Summary: Neville knows that only a complete sop would not only take in a runaway war-criminal, but also let himself be insulted by them day and night.
Notes: For the birthday of the eternally-lickable wildestranger. Apparently she chose to make me write this pairing

Comments

[wildestranger]

Ahh this is gorgeous. I love it! So delicious and so many great lines. :)

Neville smiles, nervous but tolerant, and pours more wine.

Somehow this line resonates deep within me. *g*

He's shoved up against the kitchen counter, Malfoy's hand gripped into the front of his robes again, but instead of a wand shoved to his throat, there's a hot mouth on his. The words Never thought you'd stoop so low hang there in Neville's mind, though he knows he'll never say them aloud.

This is so hot, the moment there so vividly presented and oh but Neville is lovely.

This is his thank you; Malfoy's body so skinny, fragile against his own, and hard-mouthed little kisses from those thin, sharp lips. Neville's hands feel heavy and awkward, bumping ineptly over slim, bony hips, but he refuses to feel inferior, as Malfoy gives up on kissing and fumbles frantically at the front of Neville's robes, fast breaths washing over Neville's lips.And this is why they can be equal, both with their different flaws and insecurities that become tolerable when

[kabeyk]

Wine! And freckles! Sorry, will be more sane in the morning. Thank you.x

kxx

[kabeyk]

Can't believe you made me post this last night, gah.

And this is why they can be equal, both with their different flaws and insecurities that become tolerable when together.

Yes! Neville is shy and awkward, and Draco is a rubbish kisser, heh.

So... freckle pictures? And happy birthday, because last night didn't really count.x

kxx

[scoured]

I love this part:

Neville hugs both hands around his cup of tea as he talks about plants, and stands over the spot on the kitchen floor where he and Malfoy fucked, as if Dean will see it if he doesn't hide it.

It's so real, and so very Neville. Certain that everyone can see his shame. I just really enjoy the way you characterize their relationship - Malfoy is so very broken, and he's getting better with Neville, but he wouldn't ever admit to this. Beautiful.

[kabeyk]

Aw, thank you. That's exactly what I was trying to get across, so thank you.x

kxx

[beckaandzac]

I'm really impressed with your Neville. It's so easy to write him meek and sweetly unassuming, dithering about with plants, but you've given him a bit of backbone, and self-awareness. Nice job with a weird pairing!

[kabeyk]

Yes, I was trying to get him in character but not too pathetic, heh.

Thank you!

kxx

[caseylane]

Draco/Neville! It's like Christmas again. I loved this story, how the potions just ended up next to the vegetables, how Neville stands in the spot where they had sex for the first time. Thanks so much for this.

[kabeyk]

Aw, thank you.x

kxx

[stellastars]

*g* I liked this quite a lot. Draco and Neville do work well as a pairing, don't they?

Anyway, I think I've mentioned in earlier fics how much I enjoy your Draco. Neville was equally perfect here -- I really enjoyed how he held his own against Draco and their relationship had a nicely balanced dynamic.

And this line, btw...
Well that's because I'm harbouring a runaway war-criminal and keeping him as my sex-slave...
...fantastic!

[kabeyk]

They sort of do, which is insane. I find Draco difficult to write.

But yes, I wanted them fairly equal, if in a twisted sort of way.

Heh, I liked the idea that Neville at least thought stuff like that even if he didn't usually say it.

Thank you.x

kxx