Taste Of You Part One

[kaenxhagane]

Okay...So I promised Connie a while ago some vampire smut in a forest. Weeeeeeeeeeell...I kinda forgot until just recently. And by then I was swamped with work here at college. So now I have some free time soI decided I would write her her porn. Connie loves her porn you know! XDDDD I love you big sis! Here is the angsty part 1! Any mistakes will

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[bloody_winged]

Awww *sniffles*
This was so beautiful. I'm not sure if I know the song you inserted, but I was listening to 'Stay with me' by Danity Kane while reading this and... yeah >.>
Anyway, I really like how... smooth you write(You still haven't given me the link to your ff.net account btw, therefore this was the first I ever read of you XD). I wouldn't exactly say it was IC, but since this obviously seems to be an AU they don't have to be :P (also: I want to read the story to go with this. This is a sidefic, isn't it? *blinks* *Has no clue* ^^;;)
The only thing missing so far is the promised porn XD But I'm looking forward to that one coming :P
I really liked this! :D The only thing that comes to mind as any kind of critique would be:

"Roy...: Ed whispered, voice trembling "Roy...(...)"

I would make that into:

"Roy..." Ed whispered, voice trembling, "Roy...(...)"

But since I guess that's prolly a typo... XD Just thought I would point it out ~.^
I'm looking forward to reading more of this :D

[kaenxhagane]

Damn....I thought I got rid of that typo...LJ kept being an ass and moving my paragraphs around...How it does that I shal never know. And I think the mood song I put is the one I used. *noddles* And thanks for reminding me of the link.

And it is a side fic "technically". It's from my fic Vampire love. Its more of a deleted scene if you will. I was planning on doing it like that, how roy reveals to Ed he is his reincarnated mate and all but since I changed the plot it doesn't work anymore.

And the porn is coming up...Nearly done writing it. And thanks! I didn't know my writing was smooth...*blinks* My other fics probably don't run as smooth but they are all being redone. XD

[bloody_winged]

*grinses* There is a reason I use Semagic. I only can say it again and again XD And I'll have to check that song out ^__

[kaenxhagane]

Hahahahaha....Yeah, I'll see about the paragraphs but I just write as it comes. XD And here is the link! http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1054606/

XDDDD It's not my best writing since I changed my style but it's good enough. XD Vampire Love is the one attatched to this. And I have some more deleted scenes here on LJ.

[winds_of_water]

*flails* Kiss him, Roy!

...cry more, Ed! That's right, misunderstand Roy's words. Believe he doesn't want you so that I can have even more lovely angst in the next part, as Roy attempts to set you straight.

...among doing other things to you >_>

And I will always love that song, I'm so happy you decided to use it. It just fits so well. *glomps her baby sister* I love it so far! I want pornmoooore!

[greedy_lover]

MORE!!!!!!!!!!! Poor Ed, you can really feel his emotions. I loved it and how you know Roy loves him