A new poem ^^

[kahuri_chan]

Well I managed to chalk up another poem as of now it's untitled hopefully that will change soon enough It's of the Weiss Kreuz Gulhen RanXKen variety if you squint enough and contains spoilers for the end of the series. So don't read unless you don't care about that lol. Enjoy and tell me what you think please ^^

Comments

[taes]

*On the poem*

I like your beginning...it's a natural lead. Sounds very much like we're being spoken to.

Great phrasing-- I especially like, "until you left my sight".

It's quite a nice poem-- though, you've got a minor typo, love, it's probably "your lips" your narrator wants to kiss, not "you". :)

Once again, a nice beginning, and oh, that's an interesting way to end the poem...

*thinks about this for a bit*

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[kahuri_chan]

thank you for the advice and for catching that typo I appreciate it. ^^

[shinimegami21]

oooh! so angsty! i've always loved your poems, hikari. i can sense the coldness btwn them, or at least the heat and the coldness that clashed btwn them. sorry it took so long for me to comment. i kept forgetting to read it ^^;;; forgive meee!