A Loyal Dog, Altair/Malik

[kai19999]

 “Very well done, Altaïr. You never fail to meet my expectations,” Al Mualim said nonchalantly, his back turned to the assassin as usual.

The Master stared out the giant window, watching the smooth movements of the birds as they soared with true freedom under their spanned wings. Altaïr had begun his mission; killing nine key figures throughout

Comments

[azzy]

Oh my! Now that was a unexpected twist, and i LOVED it! But then again, i am a sucker for angst. Well written angst. =)

Brilliant ^^

[kai19999]

Thank you! It's been a while since I've written angst, so I was a little nervous. But I think I might be writing more of these two again soon...

[nescienx]

This is very promising. C: I look forward to seeing it developed further! The idea behind it is brilliant, even if the premise of the story broke my heart though. :C The last line you wrote was very poignant and poetic; a good way to end the fic.

[kai19999]

Thanks! Though, it's only a oneshot - the idea of concept won't go any further. And gahhhh I was so happy with the last line! I played with the wording so much, but I think I like how it ended up.

[harehare]

woa that's so sad! but i kinda like it! but,but! wow this such complicated feeling!

[kai19999]

Woot! Mission accomplished! I was hoping to leave the reader torn between that happened and their joy of reading the story. Thanks~!

[spottedzebra]

Wow this is great! A very different sort of story, but I really enjoyed it!

[kai19999]

Thank you very much!

[umi_malfoy]

oh this was great angst!
like the twist and the last phrase is so touching in a way.

[kai19999]

Thank you very much. I'm glad you think so, because I was intending it to be that way (: