Aquamarine.

[kaidenblake]

Begging you to lock me underwater
I don't speak the language of keys
and when you asked me to swim
I found myself at the bottom of these seas

I don't mind if I'm drowning
I'll just pull you down with me
and if I'm not here tomorrow
You know where I'll be

Comments

[apples_kiwi]

I felt so creepy after I read this. I had to look around, make sure there wasn't a crazy murderer behind me.
I mean that in a good way, haha. You brought the emotion out of me.
I really like the way you began this one, it caught my attention right away on my friends page.
And the ending was perfect.

[kirehsei]

ungracious: i mean no offense by this but i feel the need to say something.... critiquing/feedback is exactly what a writer needs, however, i would suggest that you need to be a bit more flexible in how you are interpreting the words. set the technical form aside and take in the whole. they're not just letters on paper or, as in this case, pixels on a screen. there may be thoughts (random or structured), emotions, stories, and so many other things that you can't or don't see if you pick it apart piece by piece.

kaiden: having said what i did above, i must agree with ungracious on the last line. not that it is too reminiscent of fall out boy, but that in this case the repetition doesn't feel necessary. otherwise, i adored the imagery ^_^ hugs + <3 hun!