Erm... a.k.a. "dear friends help me plzkthx"?

[kain_du_ciel]

H'okai, this is where I go "Dear Friends HELP ME PLZKTHX." See, I have this part of a story, and... well... it's, like, going nowhere. Seriously. Absolutely nowhere, just in circles in the deep end of the pool of this-needs-plottage. Even though it had a plot. That. Just kinda... failed

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[jeredulevenin]

I would think not. I'm blonde, and I most certainly do NOT have cooties. As to where to go with this... the "you can't kiss me" line kinda breaks the flow. It turns it into an ending point for the fic. If you leave that part out, or go through with it, it would be easier to write more of this.

And I'm not just saying that because I'm a fangirl. That IS the "falling apart point," as you put it.

I really like this, though!

[kain_du_ciel]

Hehe. It's actually supposed to drop like that. I like pulling up suspense, then TOTALLY killing it. ^_^ It makes me happy.

The only thing I really can't figure out is where to take it next. >.> Blaarghies.

[jeredulevenin]

Um, put commas between your tags. Otherwise it's all ONE tag, unlike deviantART.

[parametric]

Hmm . . . . well, I wouldn't presume to tell you how to write your shtuff, lovely, but maybe you could have Dem clam up at that a bit and just leave, and Zexion feels bad? I dunno . . . . just an idea, 'cause you asked for them.

And by the way, I LOVE IT. <3 <3 <3

You're joining the Abyssal Kingdom RPG too? Awesome sauce! It'll be so much fun!

And wow. I accidentally posted this comment with my RP accounts. Whoops. But I deleted it. Oh well. XD

[kain_du_ciel]

Harhar. I got the email and had to laugh. I was a ninja and guessed you!

Juu = hearts.

I like your idea. Will have to fiddle with it some, but, of course, since it IS for you... I figure I could basically do w'eva with it. -maniacal laughter-

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EASTER! <3

-gives bunny-