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BREAKING DAWN WRITE-A-THON

Aug 02, 2008 19:53

MEND THE FAILBOAT.

After reading Breaking Dawn, what do you wish had happened? What do you think should have happened? Hey, what could have happened, if not for various SMeyer-related reasons?

Here's your chance to rewrite the book how you want to, if only in a few little pieces.

( spoilers under cut )

meta post, breaking dawn write-a-thon, uc glee

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I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 3 2008, 03:47:23 UTC

Forever begins with cascades of ruffles and satin bows falling in perfect whispers. It slithers through the cracks of their first night accidentally. Bella presses her lips to his cheek and his move to her slender neck feeling blood rushing past his open mouth. She slips forward and his teeth graze her skin. His tongue stains red, slides over his lips, and there's no turning back.

They never get a honeymoon.

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As she turns she bites down hard, leaving another row of teeth marks on her marred lips. Nails press hard into clenched fists. When she wakes up - when her once brown eyes blink black with hunger, she whispers she’s all right, but the truth pours from her mind into his. He hears her for the very first time.

I never wanted to get married.Arms pull her back, Emmett's and Jasper's faces strained, imaginary sweat drips down impossible muscles when she breaks free. The hiking girl never has a chance. She's the third on their long run north. Thin hands close around a tiny throat, ripping, biting, clawing, glowing red ( ... )

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 kaiwynn August 3 2008, 03:50:38 UTC

OH GOD.

this is breaking dawn. THIS IS WHAT SHOULD HAVE HAPPENED. i swear if smeyer was writing fanfic, why didn't she read good fanfic like this first?

It was when Bella realized she no longer cared for what Tanya and Edward may have done. It was when the flutter of keys and the light hands on the ivory didn’t wrench her heart from her chest. It was when Tanya sighed Edward’s name just audibly with eyes closed and lips perched in a perfect smile.

holy crap. this is beautiful.

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 3 2008, 03:55:03 UTC

Hee. THANK YOU! <333 Is it narcisistic to say I agree I think this is what should have happened too >_> Because there's no nessie. And the sex is twisted and bloody. And he changes her by accident during sex, which, btw, I totally though was going to happen pre-nessie.

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 kaiwynn August 3 2008, 03:55:58 UTC

not narcissistic at all. NO NESSIE. and realistic. and guhhh, with the characters pre-bd, i could totally see this happening. i can SEE them making these choices. and now they're foreign to me D:

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 3 2008, 03:56:57 UTC

BECAUSE SMEYER IS FAIL but I'm really flattered ty<3333

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 lostpoisoned August 4 2008, 04:30:38 UTC

FJUIJRIOESJRIJSEIORJSERJSEIJRISEJRS.

beautiful ♥

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 4 2008, 04:32:33 UTC

Thank you &hearts

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 4 2008, 18:37:22 UTC

i am speechless.
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ilovethis.

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 nuits_froides August 4 2008, 18:38:02 UTC

that was mee.

Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 4 2008, 20:46:48 UTC

awww thank you so much!!! <333

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Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 6 2008, 00:18:51 UTC

Hee. that'sokitmakesmehappythatyoulikedit. <33 Thank you <333 I'm glad you thought it fit together and stuff. YAY. Maybe if I write a companion I should write about what Jake was doing while Bella was gone? That would be a challenge because I've never written his POV before. IDK RANDOM MUSINGS HI I LOVE YOU.

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Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 6 2008, 00:23:04 UTC

We totally do new moon from jake's POV would be awesome plus then we'd get to hear more from the pack who I fangirl like woah.

I'm also comfortable with certain characters. Tanya. Edward. Bella (sometimes). Rosalie. Mostly Tanya. Sometimes Jasper. But I mean I like pushing the boundaries of my comfort zone with writing sometimes? Hence actually writing plot. As opposed to brief moments of pretty. That I don't have to explain as much of.

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Re: I was young, I was green, prone to foolish decisions, jacob/bella edward/bella, PG-13 miss_mishi August 6 2008, 00:28:51 UTC

IKR? I love the wolves so much and I've written ONE wolfy drabble that was Sam/Leah and like I love the rest of the pack so much. I definitely agree pack>>cullens. Except in BD that was FAILPACK BUT THAT'S OK BECAUSE BREAKING DAWN DOESN'T EXIST WHAT.

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