D.gray-man fanfic

[kanda_samurai_8]

  Hi guys first fanfic so feel free to comment and tell me what you think! I will try to update soon.        Warning: yoai (in future chapters), tons of possible typos! Kanda's mouth.    Disclaimer: If I owned D.Gray-man would I really be writing a disclaimer.? sorry about how short this is. Yullen(KandaXAllen)  Story- Who wants to go to the park?

Comments

[aidannwn]

First, I have to tell you to use a lj-cut. If you don't know what it is, it hides the long text so I don't see the entire story in my friend page.

As for posting this on the com, just link it, don't post the story over again. That way, you don't need to use lj-cut twice.

From what I did glance over, you could use a beta for your story. More than your spellings it's your punctuation that needs attention. And some of your sentences sound -- odd.

I'm not been negative, you just need to iron out the kinks.

Please don't stop writing, this sounds like an interesting story.

[kanda_samurai_8]

please tell me how to do this.

[aidannwn]

http://net33.us/ljcut.htm

It isn't working

[kanda_samurai_8]

It isn't working...it is driving me crazy!!! What exactly can i do on your friend's page.

[nherizu]

sorry about all the typo's yeah i hate spelling....I wish I could spell:(

Ah, maybe you can use the spell-checker tool provided by Ms Words/Open office/any program you use?
It helps to eliminate typos ^^
And yeah, alternatively you can ask someone to proof-read your story (this person is ususally called as beta reader).

Considering you are new, I think what you wrote there is interesting, you just need to keep writing and reading (yeah reading other people's fanfics helps a lot, really ^^). And onto the story, lol, Kanda really loves his cute little Yuki there. But where's Allen? xD

And since I saw your post in the DGM communty, I think I need to tell you that you forgot to link your fanfic there ^^

[kanda_samurai_8]

Thanks, i wish i could use word but my computer's word out dates this site or something so it won't let me transfer my post with-out cutting out parts..and I don't know how to lj-cut my post!!! It's killing me:( Oh and Allen is in chapter two which I am writing,promise to post soon(in my jounal not on the community).

[rinhail]

You should definitely space your story. Give it paragraphs to look more appealing and confuse the readers less. As well as use spell check. It is annoying (because it's telling you all the mistakes you did, and that can be very discouraging) but a very helpful tool.

Overall, not a bad story. :)

[kanda_samurai_8]

Thank you!!!!!!!!