Comments | kanintallrik: fic; i am the fly who dreams of the spider

kanintallrik

fic; i am the fly who dreams of the spider

Oct 14, 2012 14:30

exo, jongin/kyungsoo, 2800~ words, R
the things jongin does for kyungsoo. (urban fantasy!au)
warnings: implied possibility of character death

( He stands anyway, takes a step back as well and flits his gaze up and down Kyungsoo’s body. Over the dark bangs cut short over his forehead, the hands still tucked away behind his back, over the twitch of his lips and the curve of his belly. )

randomly posting fics to my own journal

Comments 15

envybleedsgreen October 14 2012, 14:40:49 UTC

WAIT, WHY DOES THIS MILDLY REMIND ME OF TEEN WOLF.

AND I THOUGHT THEY WERE GOING TO HAVE SEX. OMFG, YOU GOT ME THERE.

kanintallrik October 14 2012, 14:53:30 UTC

um i haven't seen teen wolf but possibly bec werewolves?

trolol ofc you did. thanks for reading, dear!

anewsymphony October 14 2012, 17:20:57 UTC

this was so effing haunting and the feeling of suspense never left me the whole time i was reading it ;_; altho admittedly the suspense at first was from waiting for the kink!sex to happen LOL

kanintallrik October 14 2012, 18:02:02 UTC

oh, that's just what i was going for so that's great to hear. and lmao, i hope you weren't too disappointed /cackles
thanks for commenting, dear! :3

indiesnopp October 14 2012, 21:35:25 UTC

This was just gorgeous.

kanintallrik October 15 2012, 07:25:19 UTC

thank you! :'3

stroplok October 15 2012, 09:30:27 UTC

this was so masterly woven together - from the slightly hilarious beginning with chanyeol, to the rising suspense of everything that followed - the dialogue that left so much hanging in the air between them. and that beautiful wonderful ending. just aaaahhhhh.....

His knees meet the concrete, skidding a few painful inches but Kyungsoo’s arms are already around his neck, lips hitting his cheek before finding his mouth and he claws at Kyungsoo’s waist, unable to care that it probably hurts.

favourite part....

kanintallrik October 16 2012, 21:02:42 UTC

augh this makes me really happy! ;--; i worked hard on the suspense and the dialogue so i'm glad i managed to get that across. thank you, dear! :)

shineesbright October 16 2012, 19:32:51 UTC

I adored this, I had to restrain myself and not race to the end because the suspense was killing me xD

Well done bb, the whole scene at w. chanyeol had me lolling, I had to reread the '8 handcuffs' xD also
....he didn’t miss Chanyeol inconspicuously slipping down into his unlabeled shopping bag. RACK says the first; RACK in big purple letters with Risk Aware Consensual Kink beneath in a smaller, matching font. The lower half of a woman’s face sits just below the text. She has bright red lipstick and a studded collar with a leash attached.
The other tells of a psychiatrist hotline. It has both an email address and a phone number.
Jongin chucks them both into the nearest trashcan and leaves with long, swift steps.
LMFAO!

I think I cottoned on it wasn't them just having kinky sex when they were talking about pissing then →
“What, am I getting hairy?” Kyungsoo says, patting his cheek with a hand. A chuckle clucks in his throat. “I know my own body, trust me.” I legit gasped ( ... )

kanintallrik October 16 2012, 21:27:12 UTC

oh bbdear, this comment ;-----; i'm so glad you picked up on those small details! i struggled to keep the subtlety but still get my points across, and the fact that i have seemed to manage is just really relieving ;--; i'm happy you liked it, thank you so much! :)