To The Moon And Back

[karmasoup]

The Hustle

“Build me a ladder to the moon,” he said,

and heaven sure knows how I’ve tried...

I’ve busted my stump til my fingers have bled,

til my marrow has ached, and some part of me died.

“Dig me a well to the core of the Earth...

...and don’t even stop ’til you’re through

Comments

[tonithegreat]

I kept trying to find the music to read this as a song- like maybe a mocking march kind of thing. Well done! You captured the frustration well.

[karmasoup]

I suppose it could be put to music... perhaps I'll try to sing it, ans see what tune fits it. I wasn't equipped this week, though, to have posted a recording of it, but perhaps in future weeks I might try something musical. Thanks for reading and commenting! :-)

[d0gs]

Oh I loved this and its structure!!

[karmasoup]

Thanks very much! :-)

[alycewilson]

I think it was a good idea to go with a poem for this one. It gets the main idea across with a lot of pizzazz.

[karmasoup]

It didn't start out as intent so much as resulted from desperation, as I was pressed for time, and there wasn't enough bandwidth left before deadline to complete the essay I'd wanted to write... there are certainly stories contained in these stanzas that could be told in more detail, but I still think this effectively gets the gist across, and I ended up pretty happy with it. Thanks for the vote of confidence in my pizzazz! ;-)

[flipflop_diva]

I love the rhythm and flow of this. It's fun to read but at the same time the frustration and annoyances really come through. It's the grown-up version of Dr. Seuss!

[karmasoup]

Ha! That it might be, indeed. I'm glad you enjoyed it! :-)

[pixiebelle]

I enjoyed the flow of this piece. I don’t really know poetry, but this one has a fun feel to it. Whimsical.

[karmasoup]

Thanks very much! Funny enough, the fun, whimsical nature of it was kinda accidental... I think the cadence reminded my subconscious of Dr. Seuss, and I was also thinking about "what I wanted to be when I grew up" as a kid, so the words I chose just naturally spilled out to match that underlying theme, but when I realized what I had done unintentionally, I was pleased with it, so I left it like that intentionally, which made it more fun for me all around... a sort of organic result from a series of happy accidents. ;-)