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karmic380
jungle gym
Sep 14, 2004 21:42
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verbal_tar
September 16 2004, 23:05:24 UTC
Fucking.. damn, Kaz.
This. I have no specific comment. I have no critique for how I'd change a line or phrase or this or that.
The sound, the rhythm, the flow of words. Feels like you had this one down, nailed on the head, before you ever even typed it up.
This feels like one where the poem wrote itself.
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karmic380
September 17 2004, 05:45:09 UTC
It's true. I was but the hand attached to the pen on this one. It flowed out before I could even think.
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This. I have no specific comment. I have no critique for how I'd change a line or phrase or this or that.
The sound, the rhythm, the flow of words. Feels like you had this one down, nailed on the head, before you ever even typed it up.
This feels like one where the poem wrote itself.
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