Collide: Chapter 4, part one

[kyasuriin]

Title: Collide
Pairing: Remus/Sirius of Harry Potter fandom
Rating: NC-17 overall, although this part is more like PG-13.
Summary (for all parts): AU (Remus never went to Hogwarts). Everytime Remus gets close to someone, they start to uncover the truth about his strange disappearances and injuries. He can't stand the look on their face when he tells

Comments

[carmine_ink]

Brilliant. I'm really enjoying this so far; you're doing a fantastic job. ;)

[kyasuriin]

thanks so much, I'm glad you're enjoying it :D

[happi_feet]

I scrolled through and didn't see my icon, so I guess I forgot to comment when I read it. Anyhoo, great fic, still loving it. One teensy concrit. You said self-depreciating but I think you probably meant self-deprecating whereas one means "To lessen the price or value of", the other (respectively) means "to express strong disapproval of; deplore; belittle".

Love it, going to read the next part now.

[kyasuriin]

ah, thanks so much - you are correct! this is what happens when I don't have someone beta'ing as I go, heh. (I'm sure my beta is looking forward to beta'ing it when it's done, poor girl :p)

[yue_d]

Argh.

So, I'm behind again ^___^;;

But no worries, I will catch up soon enough (and by soon enough, I mean like right now as I bound over to the next entry to read furiously)

Wonderful installment. Love Delilah as always, devilish little minx that she is, and smitten!remus is just total ownage XD ~ Also, love the bit of mystery you threw in there at the end O_o;; 'M very interested to see what Remus' research uncovers :O

[sixteenthnote]

Ahh I absolutely love this fic. I adore how you didn't turn Sirius into a punk, which is something most writers seem to do. I've always pictured Sirius as aristocratic, and you bring that flavour. I only have one thing to point out:

Slowly, blank ink materialised onto the page and when it was done, there was a complete listing of all the books on unicorns in the library.

I'm assuming you meant to say "black" there. (:

Also, I know this comment is like aeons after you posted this, but I've just now found this fic, and it's amazing <3

[brighty18]

This just keeps getting better and better. Are you "cheating" on NaNo and editing? ;)

[kyasuriin]

hi! Thanks so much for reading and all your great comments! :D I'm getting caught up on reading them with a smile on my face. I started writing this for Nano last year and so while most of what i have to far was written then, I didn't get it done and am still writing it! So in answer to your editing question, I have not had anything beta'd and I haven't gone back and done any serious editing at all. That being said, for the parts since Nano (everything since Chapter 4, part 3), I took more time on so that may explain it? In any case, thanks so much for your comments! I shall go back and reply (but probably not tonight since I have oodles of schoolwork :p)