Very much crack. Very fun! Though it's not like Tim and Dick need a *reason* to have sex, at least, not in my book. :)
There were a couple grammar things that bothered me and probably only me, and I hope you don't mind if I point them out...
When you say "physic" I'm fairly certain you mean "psychic."
Towards the beginning you say "a alien spaceship" and it should be "an alien spaceship."
And in "Tim lied on the bed" lied should be lay.
Loved the bit with the playing cards, and "I'd rather keep my hands, thanks." That would be a really cool tool for the Batfamily. So long as they didn't get them mixed up with regular cards...
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Good for you! And with some Bruce/Clark as a bonus!
Can't wait to see what you come up with next!
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Thanks!
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There were a couple grammar things that bothered me and probably only me, and I hope you don't mind if I point them out...
When you say "physic" I'm fairly certain you mean "psychic."
Towards the beginning you say "a alien spaceship" and it should be "an alien spaceship."
And in "Tim lied on the bed" lied should be lay.
Loved the bit with the playing cards, and "I'd rather keep my hands, thanks." That would be a really cool tool for the Batfamily. So long as they didn't get them mixed up with regular cards...
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Nor mine either. Any 'reasons' are just flimsy excuses.
And I'm very grateful for the errors being pointed out, because now I can fix them! So, thanks!
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Loved Dick groping Tim in his sleep.
Becuase he so totally would, too.
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