[fic] Anesthetized

[kathy20121]

Fandom: Naruto
Pairing: Uzumaki Naruto and Uchiha Sasuke
Prompt: Birthday
Word count: 4,447
Rating: M
Disclaimer: I don’t own Naruto
Warnings: Explicit sexual situations.
Summary: He had come to understand that just as alcoholics craved for liquor and canvas needed brush-strokes, Naruto would always long for Sasuke… The war is over. Naruto

Comments

[aquarian_days]

This was so lovely! It's amazing how the fic leaves you feeling hopeful even though from an outside perspective, these two don't have a lot to be hopeful about. Sasuke being let out just once doesn't translate to him being let out regularly anytime soon. Still, Naruto has managed to awaken some faith in Sasuke, something which he hasn't had in a long time, so it feels like they'll eventually find a way to be together, and that neither will give up. Hope to read more fics from you in the future! :)

[kathy20121]

Thanks so much ^^ yeah, their situation is pretty bad, but at least Sasuke's come to terms with the fact that he does feel something for Naruto and has probably felt it all along, plus he's not putting a shield between them anymore, so at least that part of the relationship's better.

Thanks a lot for leaving a comment! =)

[reddo27]

Aw, aw, aw, aw~ I was like "OMG, OMG, OMG, DEDICATION FOR ME!!!" for good two hours before I calmed myself down to even try and read the story *grins like an-yamamoto-idiot* But I managed somehow ;) And thank you SO much for this dedication <3 I never thought I could have such an influence on others. Good to know~ Maybe I'll get you to write 6927 someday...? *giggles silly

[kathy20121]

Hehe. I'm really, really happy you liked it! And your words are just too kind to me =D

That's one of the things I was most nervous about because I figured that even if Naruto's the one leading the way, Sasuke's not being all innocent and sweet about it haha, I think that wouldn't be right, 'cause it's not in his nature. It's something new for him, but he's sort of aware of what's happening, and he's just letting Naruto do what he wants with him *grins*
OMG, I had never drawn the comparison, but NaruSasu is sooo like 8018, my love for both of them has increased even further. Now I want to write something with uke!Hibari, but after I write one I've been planning (I only have the summary, I suck xD) with him as seme (sort of) xD

And thaaaaanks! Your comment made my daaay =)

[reddo27]

I am here to please *bows lowly*

You say that you are writing uke!Hibari who turned out to be seme... Hmm, I wanna read it *rubs her hands* Oh, I wanna read it~ Who is he topping? Yamamoto?

[kathy20121]

Nope. It's just that I now feel like writing uke!Hibari. The one I plan to write (when the university gives me a rest) has Hibari as seme, but it's kinda weird 'cause he's leading Yamamoto on what to do, not doing anything himself, hehe.
And yeaahh, Yamamoto, they're my khr! OTP, though I enjoy other couples that involve them, I think I'll never get the inspiration to write them separately! xD

[repanse]

Naruto doesn't work as a seme, that's why you can't help but make him sweet. Uke!Sasuke works even less, no matter how cute he may appear. Naruto doesn't have one bit of that initiative when it comes to physical touch (let alone sex) and Sasuke just isn't the character. I'm sorry but I'm a IC-whore so I don't even consider NaruSasu an option. I want to be clear though, to me the problem is in NaruSasu itself, not in one's writing skills...in fact you did well, you minimized damage especially by not making things too sappy (something I can't stand regardless, NaruSasu or not).
The only thing I would like to point out to you is the theme of Naruto or Sasuke being abused by villagers/shinobis/etc.....maybe it's because I found it in soooo many stories, but I can't help but feel like it's stereotyped and poor drama.

[kathy20121]

Thanks so much for such a complete review, really, it's good to have pointed out what you're doing wrong in order to grow as a writer

because i've just seen this argument too often.

[transient_words]

I'm sorry. I'm going to chime in here, and I didn't even read your fic (though you seem to be a decent writer and all

Re: because i've just seen this argument too often.

[kathy20121]

Ok, let me rephrase that 'cause I really think I used the wrong word. Oblivious does fit better, but when I used the word innocent I meant sexually, not otherwise, but either way is wrong (I'm going around in circles, sorry) is not that he's innocent, it's that it seems as he's a bit uninterested, I mean, he did create the sexy no jutsu, but if I recall correctly, when he gives the book to Kakashi at the beginning of the second part, he said something like he didn't understand it or found it boring, idk

[repanse]

(I had to split the post in two parts because it wouldn't fit. The first one being the long one above. Sorry