Moonlight Monday!

[katicalocke]

Author's Note: All right, I've decided that I can post a new chapter every other Monday. So you'll get a new one in two weeks. I wish I could update sooner, but this is a doable schedule and gives me time to work on other projects on the side. Speaking of which...

Broken Wings is published! It went live on Amazon on Saturday. The book is beautiful (

Comments

[mee_eep]

Oh the angst!

This puts Izeri's actions in a better light and is kinder to Charias :)

[katicalocke]

Yes, always the angst, but this time it's a bit more coherent, lol.

Thanks for the comment! I appreciate it. ^_^

[mee_eep]

Much sweeter emotion for Izeri; I could see how the other version worked - Izeri being calculating and non-human, but I have to admit I prefer this version. I like romnance, and with this there's still issues between them but there's hope of a real connection while in the old version there felt a risk of explosions and walking away, because some truthes are impossible to live with and secrecy festers. Though Izeri is still keeping his secret he's not using Charias and you've showen he does care, also it's sexual without the very sudden sex.

[katicalocke]

Thanks! That's it exactly, the secret is still there and it's a problem, but it isn't suddenly the main focus of the story, like it became in the other version. Because whether Izeri tells Charias or not right this moment isn't supposed to be all that important. Their changing relationship is.

Thanks again! ^_^

JW

[anonymous]

Sorry to have to say this but I think it is still a bit too much sex too soon. Izeri is full of shark bites, nearly drowned, and worried about how he will avoid telling Charias about the shival

Re: JW

[katicalocke]

Thank you so very much for your in-depth and thoughtful review. You may be right and this is too soon and out of character, however, I'm done with making revisions for now. I think, when taken in context with the upcoming chapters that I haven't posted yet, this scene will seem less out of character. Your observations are much appreciated, please don't think that they aren't, but I'm going to stick with what I have and if, at the end when it's all finished, things still don't flow right, then I'll worry about rewriting again. For now, I'm just going to concentrate on what lies ahead

Re: JW

[anonymous]

Dear Ms Locke

Re: JW

[katicalocke]

Thank you so much for giving me all this to think about. It's clear you've given it more thought than I have, honestly

[nekoii_desu]

Now THAT was more like it! more kissing (and groping) is definately more like it, especially for a shy new couple