(Untitled)

[katmarfo]

So, I am finally back to working on the James story. It took forever but it is down to crunch time all up in here, and I am nervous. This is a complete overhaul and has a totally different tone than the first few drafts, but I am really digging it right now. So read it if you like, it's just the opening scene. If I decide to keep it like this it's

Comments

[becomearockstar]

I really like it, although it's definitely a different feel because of the POV change. But for the inner monologue, why don't you just say: "Yeah, so do stab wounds," (s)he thought.

I think in literature, as you know from every English class ever, people are looking for hidden meanings. There's a reason she's wearing a red shirt, there's a reason he said that, there's a reason he's a Libra, etc... So in order for the meanings that people try to interpret from your writing to make sense, these things have to be consistent. But you are so right; I am incredibly inconsistent and hypocritical. Maybe you should write a story with all inconsistent characters as a satire on English professors.

[drag_her_down]

I liked it better before, to be honest, but I know that wasn't working. But I totally got it, like...I remember you saying you didn't mean for there to be any sexual tension but your workshop people said there was, and I didn't feel that way at all. I don't know.

I also agree with Jessy that everyone definitely always looks for hidden meanings...maybe if they aren't always really there.

Maybe for a character to be consistent and change at the same time you have to show some solid kind of proggression in their character, how they grew up or learned something.