VERY IMPORTANT PLEASE RESPOND

[katryxx]

How would you punctuate the sentence below? Edit, reword, rewrite as appropriate, but punctuation is what really counts. I'm known to be comma-happy, and I know there are too many included, but I can't figure out where to omit them to have the most correct sentence left. PLEEZ HALP.

The sentence:

For me, teaching in general, and the topic of

Comments

[mengus]

Occam's Razor.

I think that teaching science is predicated upon a multidirectional flow of informantion.

[katryxx]

The kicker is that I have to sell myself not only for science positions, but math openings as well.

I think that teaching (science in particular, but teaching in general) is predicated upon a multidirectional flow of information. ?

I DIG predicated, though. You get extra credit.

[mengus]

Then just use "math and science" since they are your specific targets.

[katryxx]

Teaching math and science is predicated

or

Teaching math and science are predicated ?

Argh. Thank you for your help!

[pugofwar]

For me, the flow of information is determined by the nimble Pug of War and his damnable Pug Patrol.

Smooches!

[katryxx]

I'll need your Boulder Influence when the job hunt becomes more urgent. Resources to be utilized include (but are not limited to): territorial urine markings, the art of persuasion in the form of ankle-biting, and poo to be deposited in paper bags upon doorsteps with flames liberally applied.

I knew I can count on you, Pug!

[pugofwar]

This filthy city is fueled by my urge to repent.

Also caffeine.

Lots of caffeine.

[aquarian_lefty]

I find that in teaching, especially the subject of science, a multidirectional flow of information is necessary.

It adds a passive verb, but it eliminates an adverb. And I loathe adverbs. Plus it gets rid of the prepositional phrase and gerund phrase at the beginning. Just personal preference, I guess.

[katryxx]

Awesome! Thank you so much!

[aquarian_lefty]

You're welcome.

The other suggestions people made good too.

no, THIS is comma happy

[efface]

For, me teaching, in, general and, the, topi,c, of, science in,, particular, necessa,rily involves a, multidirectional f,low of inf,o,r,mation.,,

it seems you already have your problem figured out, so don't mind me while i amuse myself.