Comments | kaybaby42: Reluctantly, I'll let you go, and hope you find your way..

kaybaby42

Reluctantly, I'll let you go, and hope you find your way..

Jan 21, 2005 13:24

I'm working on a short story, and I thought it was pretty good.. so did Krista (insert smile here) But Denise ('mom') didn't like it.. at all. I'm just going to put it on here, so if anyone has any feedback, good or bad, it would be greatly appreciated.. I'm my own worst critic ( Read more... )

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Nice! snoopapalooza January 21 2005, 20:45:29 UTC

I like it! I might add a little more detail to the description of the woman though! I like the potential of the story behind it!

Re: Nice! kaybaby42 January 21 2005, 20:54:46 UTC

Thanks! I made changes during last block today, and I posted it quickly.. I have to figure out how else I want to describe her..

eysktsbleding January 22 2005, 04:53:05 UTC

You spelt SEDUCTIVE wrong. :) (remember: grammatical freak!)
Good description.
*happy faces*

kaybaby42 January 22 2005, 12:59:54 UTC

haha thanks, What would I do without my grammatical freak? lol

darkangellaugh January 23 2005, 01:12:00 UTC

i love it :)

kaybaby42 January 23 2005, 01:22:08 UTC

=) thank you!