Family

[kayden_eidyak]

Entry for January week 2 contest on brigits_flame .

Prompt: Destiny

Word count: 850

Family
by Kayden Eidyak

I’m doing time. Been here a while. Not sure how long, exactly.

I’m in here for a bunch of stuff: theft, breaking and entering, assault, brawling in public, resisting arrest. You know, the usual.

I’ve seen a lot of others come and go. Sometimes they’re here a

Comments

[darlinleo]

*APPLAUSE!*
That was terrific Kay!!

[kayden_eidyak]

Thanks. :) It was the result of having gone to bed and after a couple fruitless attempts at sleep, I figured I may as well get up and write a story.

[kayden_eidyak]

Well, thank you! I've 3 dogs myself, so I really enjoy writing them as a main character.

[darthneko]

awwwwww! That was wonderful. I teared up a bit by the end. eeeee. And I love the dog's voice, how for the first part you can mistake it for a homeless human put in jail.

[kayden_eidyak]

Thank you! I was going for something emotional, but I wasn't sure I pulled it off.

[sue_bridehead]

This was so good! About the third time it repeated, I realized that he was a dog. (I know my dog's memory is about 10-15 minutes, max.) ^_^ It was the perfect length and told a heartwarming story. I loved the part about keeping the boy's secrets.

Thank you for the very enjoyable read. Good luck in the poll!

[kayden_eidyak]

Glad you liked it! I'm happy it wasn't apparent that it was a dog right from the beginning. Usually my attempts at obscurity aren't so obscure to anyone besides myself. Thanks!

[rephen]

You win the internets. Oh man, this was so moving. I knew it was a dog half-way through, and I root, I root, I root for him. I hope he was going to be picked up. And then he did. And I was pumping a fist into the air. This was brilliant. The pace and the ending! Just beautiful, emotional, incredible work.

LOVE IT.

[kayden_eidyak]

Wow...thanks Reph! I consider that high praise. Good luck this week. Looks like you've got a good chance at taking it! :)