The Final Act

[kazuya_raba]

I can continue this, but I kinda like it the way it is.  Please read and review and let me know what you think, and whether or not I should continue this by getting into the back story behind the pairings, and the new family’s future.  If I do continue it, be warned, it will be very angsty, and have a lot of Kame/NonJin pairings.  Jin will

Comments

[jajakio]

yeah me too sometime if i read akame with random girls, it just make my heart felt uneasy or angry

can i request for kame/ nonjin pairing??? i want ryokame"puppy eyes" ,or ryojin , and pikame, no pin
*need more ryokame fic'* mood

so continue please:)

[kazuya_raba]

Ｉ　ｊ’ａｄｏｒｅ　Ａｋａｍｅ，　ｂｕｔ　Ｒｙｏｋａｍｅ　ｉｓ　ｓｏｏｏｏｏｏ　ａｐｐｅａｌｉｎｇ．　　Ｉｆ　Ｉ　ｃｏｎｔｉｎｕｅ，　ｗｈｉｃｈ　Ｉ　ｔｈｉｎｋ　Ｉ　ｗｉｌｌ　ｄｏ　ｂｅｃａｕｓｅ　ｗｒｉｔｉｎｇ　ｉｓ　ｊｕｓｔ　ｓｏ　ｍｕｃｈ　ｆｕｎ，　Ｒｙｏｋａｍｅ　ｗｉｌｌ　ｐｌａｙ　ａ　ｍａｊｏｒ　ｒｏｌｅ．　Ｂｕｔ　ｉｆ　Ｉ　ｇｏ　ｂａｃｋ　ｔｈｒｏｕｇｈｏｕｔ　Ａｋａｍｅ’ｓ　ｈｉｓｔｏｒｙ，　Ｐｉｋａｍｅ，　Ｋｏｋａｍｅ，　ａｎｄ　ｍａｙｂｅ　ａ　ＳｈｕｎＫａｍｅ　ｗｉｌｌ　ｃｏｍｅ　ｉｎｔｏ　ｐｌａｙ．　　（Ｉ　ａｍ　VERY　MUCH　ｉｍｐｒｅｓｓｅｄ　ｗｉｔｈ　Shun〕。　Thanks for the comment!

[jajakio]

yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

[jajakio]

for kokame just friendship please!!!
i dont like them being lovers

[asmilewaiting]

Wow ^_^ This is really touching ♥ I love how everything sort of fell back into place ^.^ I think you could probably turn this into an amazing multi-chapter fic, but I like it as is as well. Either way, I love this fic ^_^

[kazuya_raba]

Thanks for the review. I really like this writing thing, so I probably will continue. Now that I look at it, there are so many open doors that should be explored about their past and future, so I may walk through a couple of them. Right now, I can see about 5-10 chapters.

[tia_junan]

Hey cool, a new writer who can actually write.

I want to critique this. I saw a few minor things and I always like to get rid of things that stop my eye making progress and enjoying the story. But I really,really did enjoy this story.

A lot here to work with and a lot to enjoy. thanks for taking up the wonderful weirdness of writing fanfic. I will look for more stuff from you. May I friend you?

Thanks,

Ki

[kazuya_raba]

Friend and critique away! What are your current changes, I'll fix them ASAP.

[tia_junan]

It's easier if I copy it and paste it into an email and suggest changes or do it in a doc form.

I'm at tei_ishimaru@hotmail.com

Thanks,

Ki

[firehead41]

Wow, this was really well done. I enjoyed reading all of this. Awesome job for your first fanfic! 8DDD

And I understand what you mean when you read fics with JE Boys paired up with girls. It just makes me feel...lol, like you said, weird.

Oh, and welcome to the community! I can't wait to see more from you! And I wouldn't mind you continuing this story either ^__^

Again, great job!

[kazuya_raba]

Thanks for the welcome. I really enjoy my new obsession. I will be continuing, so look out for an update soon.

[ayalonet]

As someone who wrote RyoKame fics (not in english), let me tell you that this fic is just perfect the way it is. No need to expand it. Otherwise it will be spoiled.
Love Akame here, and love your style.

[kazuya_raba]

Thank you for the review! I think I want to explore the back story a bit, but I will probably do it as separate one-shots so that each pairing can have its own story.