FIC: Really Impossible (1/3, Martha/Rose, PG-13)

[kazzy]

Title: Really Impossible (1/3)
Author: bytheseaside
(Pinch hitting) For: schizophrenic in The Rose Tyler and Martha Jones Ficathon
Rating: PG-13
Pairings: Rose/Martha; Doctor/Rose (past)
Characters: Martha, Ten, Rose, Sarah Jane, Luke
Summary: When Sarah Jane suggested he popped in for a cup of tea one day, he wasn’t expecting what she had to show him.
Disclaimer:None of

Comments

[soren_nyrond]

Interesting. The premise is definitely worth it (though you'll need a *very* good explanation for how Rose crossed back into "our" universe.

The voices feel a smidgen off, but I can't say why. A little bland, perhaps, as though you're writing their thoughts for them, rather than writing what they actually thought at the time.

Luke works, and Sarah sounds close enough, but somehow the Doctor/Martha stuff feels impersonal, and the Doctor/Rose dynamic just isn't crsytallised.

But you may we planning on resolving these in episode 2.

Soren the Lurker

[kazzy]

You're not wrong. :( I was well aware of some of the characterisation problems, but it needed to be written and it needed to be posted (for various reasons. However, I think I will go back today and look. Because I don't like the excuses I used to post it.

Thank you for taking the time to comment.

[kazzy]

Also, thank you for giving me some places to focus on. I do appreciate it. :)

[miniola1]

Well I thought it was wonderful! Great job, and I can't wait to see how this turns out!

[kazzy]

Thank you.

[neral_idazmi]

Liked it:D can't wait to see what happens next.

[kazzy]

Thank you.

[surrender_drthy]

he poked her?! idiot. he damn well DOESN'T deserve her, if he's going to poke her.
you know, i've never read a martha/rose fic. look what you've done to me! :d looking forward to the rest.