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kc_evans

Long Fic

Jul 30, 2007 23:25

Title: That's What Friends Are For
Rating: PG
Category: Romance, Humor
Pairing: Tezu/Ryo, Momo/Ann
Word Count: 8,367
Warnings: Unbeta-ed, very slightly suggestive comments, slight character OOC

( 'No wonder Ann-san kicked him out of the house. He is a slob' )

tezu/ryo

Comments 27

rasengan_gurl02 July 31 2007, 16:26:56 UTC

Love this~! ^^ especially on how Tezuka and Ryoma are so domestic and the cuddling between them :D Momo is just so dense sometimes XD

kc_evans August 2 2007, 02:02:59 UTC

Yes! Writing the domestic side of their relationship was really fun. Writing how disrupted their routine became when Momo entered the picture was even more fun. He is dense, isn't he? Luckily, it's a cute dense and sometimes he says and does the right thing. :D

I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. Thanks for letting me know your thoughts! :)

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kc_evans August 4 2007, 00:01:26 UTC

If there's anyone who qualifies for sainthood, it's definitely Tezuka. It takes a strong (and very patient) man to put up with Momo's antics, Ryoma's grumpiness, and still have time to look handsome -- with or without his shampoo.

I'm very pleased you enjoyed reading it! It was a lot of fun to write, even if I still disliked the ending. Oh, well.

obsessive_a101 August 5 2007, 06:14:21 UTC

This was wonderfully IC and just a fun-all-around-great story. (^^) The only thing I ask is: Where's Karupin?

kc_evans August 6 2007, 00:11:17 UTC

I'm happy you enjoyed reading it. As for Karupin ... er, he's around. Somewhere. Hiding. Yes, that's it, hiding.

*sneaks away amidst all the confusion*

umarekawareru August 6 2007, 16:03:24 UTC

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA OH MY GOD I HAVEN'T EVEN FINISHED READING BUT I'M GIGGLING SO MUCH AND I CAN'T GET OVER TEZUKA GIVING MOMO LOVE ADVICE *squee* DOCTOR-LOVE!TEZUKA XD XD XD XD

“Thanks, Echizen, I owe you!” he called, grabbing the bag from his hand as he raced out the door. “I’ll be home late tonight so don’t wait up for me!”

“Che. As if we would,” Ryoma muttered.

YOU. This sentence is sheer genius. Ryoma is pure snark, and pure Ryoma. I AM IN LOVE.

Later that night as they snuggled in bed, Ryoma suddenly remembered something. “We have to let Momo-senpai inside,” he said sleepily.

Really though KC, I never knew I could giggle so much.

I just noticed a typo, though ---> Really, he didn’t mind Mom as a friend but Ryoma had not signed up for a second roommate when all he needed was one. It should be 'Momo' there ;)

“Don’t throw up!” Ryoma warned. “I’m the one who’s going to have to clean it!” God. How you do this, KC, I will never know. This is sheer genius. I am in awe. Really I am ( ... )

kc_evans August 7 2007, 03:26:07 UTC

I hate typos. And Momo is most certainly not a Mom. *shudder*

I had a lot of fun trying to write this story, but I'm rather surprised the humor went over as well as it did. Normally, my idea of humor is kind of dry and corny. But Ryoma brings out the snark in all of us, I guess!

Yeah, I still hate the ending. For the longest time, I couldn't figure out how to end it and so the fic just kept growing and growing until I figured if I didn't chop it off soon, it would end up taking over the world or something. So I went for a crappy, cheesy ending that failed badly. The Omake was supposed to make up for that but I wasn't entirely happy with it, either. -_-

Well, I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, at least. Not sure it's a 10/10 but I'll take your compliments because I'm shameless like that. :D This fic been hanging over for a long time and I was relieved when I finally posted it. If I had to edit it one more time, I was going to scream. And now, I must go fix that silly typo. Grr.

zhe01 October 7 2007, 13:53:37 UTC

Why would Tezuka keep callig Ryoma "Echizen"? You don't call your lover by the last name. And why does Echizen keep referring to him as his captain? ("Buchou") It's too formal. It would be a very cold relationship with those formalities.

Otherwise, it was a fine read.

kc_evans November 2 2007, 04:24:35 UTC

Sorry for the late reply; I shall just blame school as the culprit. >.<

I guess I've never thought of 'Buchou' or 'Echizen' as formalities but titles and names first, and terms of endearments later on. It's what they call each other but I also think it's how they say it that matters. That's just the way I saw it. At the same time, you do have a point and it's something I'll consider. :)

Thanks for letting me know what you thought!