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[keegan_pan]

can someone turn this sentence into present tense for me please, I don't understand. It doesn't sound right when I do it.

The boy quietly crept through the schoolyard, looking for his next victim. The only audible sound that he made came from his collection of stolen stones, which he kept in his pocket

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[laurenxoxox]

The boy quietly creeps through the schoolyard, looking for his next victim. The only audible sound he makes comes from his collection of stolen stones, which he keeps in his pocket. that and the fornication over in that there bush. xo

[keegan_pan]

hahahaha. Oh you.

[keegan_pan]

I tried to call you, but no one was home. Boo hoo, maybe tommorrow

[occultebelta]

The boy quietly creeps through the schoolyard as he looks for his next victim. The only audible sound that he makes comes from his collection of stolen stones, which he keeps in his pocket.

Mm, English. Or not. :\

[keegan_pan]

thanx, I thought that was it, but it didn't sound right.

[occultebelta]

Yeah, it's a weirdly constructed sentence. Ah well.

[ifeltinfinite]

Hey, do you want me to write it a third time for you? 'Cause I totally cannn!!!!
Hey, what do you think of when I say the word "girl"? ....Ready... set.... close your eyes, now........."BOYS!"