Statues in the Park - a Poetry Friday post

[kellyrfineman]

My poetry sisters and I have our monthly poems up today. This month's challenge was to write any poem you want to the title "Statues in the Park", and I have to tell you that it didn't give me much guidance or speak to me in any particular way. I started thinking about various statues in various parks, and did online research where I found this

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And now I wonder...

[ext_709338]

...about those with the power to stop us, and our willingness to stand still for the process...

I like how a short, blank verse can still be a thinky poem.

RE: And now I wonder...

[lpsalas]

I really like this slightly more streamlined version, Kelly. It says a little bit less overtly, but it makes me think even more. Nicely done.

Re: And now I wonder...

[kellyrfineman]

Ditching the opening line and going right into the action was an editorial suggestion from Sara, and I really like the poem better this way - and it does what I wanted it to better.

Re: And now I wonder...

[kellyrfineman]

That was what I was going for - I'm glad it came across. We are all so willing to cede our power to others, aren't we? As if the power to alter our course/make our choices were theirs, and we need someone else's permission to make a move.

[ext_1476872]

Love the questions in the ending stanza. (And good to remember the power of just jumping straight into the action.)

[kellyrfineman]

My original draft had the "Who can forget freeze tag?" as a starter as well as at the end. Sara Lewis Holmes suggested leaving it off - SO much stronger that way!

[ext_2431743]

I had no patience for freezing! Much rather be the one unfreezing others. Maybe that's why I became a teacher??

[kellyrfineman]

Sounds plausible.