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[kenakeri]

"Ten months

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[solstice_singer]

I'm glad he wasn't a spy.

Well

[kenakeri]

That's still debatable. If he's as smart as Blue thinks he is, he probably recognises this was a trap.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

[kajel]

Nicely done!

[kenakeri]

Thank you :)

[eska818]

I don't know if you're looking for concrit or not, but the dialogue at the beginning of this scene is sort of ambiguous and I still can't figure out exactly what the "test" is, and what 10 months is referencing. I do love the idea of this story though, and I love Blue's character.

[kenakeri]

Thanks. Forgive my manners if I haven't replied to you in the past. My internet time is limited, so I've been trying to get through everyone's entries and usually run out of time to respond to comments.

Concrit's always welcome :)

Ian's a relatively new hire, and the test was whether or not he'd take the plans and run.

The dialogue in the beginning needs a lot of reworking for detail and clarity, but time was against me. Got crappy news the day this was due, (plus I got subtly embarrassed in front of the entire staff at work which is never fun) and I only posted out of sheer stubbornness.

Blue is pretty awesome, and I hope to write more about her in the future.

[eska818]

Oh no, that wasn't the case (about you ignoring me), you just didn't note in your post or tags that you were okay with hearing concrit, and as I understand it (I'm new), it can be considered very rude to comment with concrit if it's not asked for.. XD

Thank you for explaining, and I do hope you'll delve more into this story, I really like it. :)

[jem0000000]

Awww. :) But it's a good thing they weren't planning on putting him in security, since he fell asleep!

[kenakeri]

:) Thanks for reading.

[jem0000000]

You're welcome.

[eternal_ot]

Interesting set up here..:) would love to read more on this...

[kenakeri]

:) I have one or two other scenes posted under my "machine rules" tag.

[eternal_ot]

Great! lemme check that out..:) I can find only this entry there..could you pls share the link? if possible. (or maybe it is visible to friends only.)

Whoops

[kenakeri]

Sorry about that. Added you :)