[fic] Loveless

[kenken18]

Title                  : Loveless

Original author   : kenken18 aka Andez

Genre               : Romance

Rating               : Everyone can read..XD

Starring             : Okamoto Keito x OC
Author's note    : I'm not pro writer, so please act kind for me...XDDD. Thanks to lha_chan who re-write this fic into English from Indonesian.

Comments

[lovegahora]

ffffffff so long /goes read

[kenken18]

<3333 have you read all???

[lovegahora]

of course bb!

[angelika20]

FIRST!

[angelika20]

hiks. second...

[kenken18]

sayang ngel..
betewe besok ketemu di halte busway jelambar..jam 12.30 yaaaaa

[angelika20]

oh baca sms gw jg toh. hahahaha.
jelambar tuh dimana dah? aduh tar gw tanya mas2nya deh. tapi gak ada halte yg deketan aja gt? lol.
ok jam stenga 1 yaw.

[lovegahora]

KEITO RAMEN SHOP xD

[kenken18]

KOYAMA's child..XD

[lovegahora]

lolololol

[lovegahora]

“I haven’t late, have I? Kei?”

FIRST PERSON IN MIND: KEI INOO /bricked

[kenken18]

don't think INOO..
because many people think the same.../fail

[lovegahora]

b-but its because of `KEI` /fail

[crescentharpe]

LOOOOOOOOOONG

/bookmarks for tomorrow XD

[kenken18]

wait your next comment...<3

[crescentharpe]

i could've cried if the grammar is better but nonetheless, the plot is good.

I like how you incorporated the stars and the gloves in the story. How those good memories turned into painful ones.

I think what hurts the most is Keito's parting words where he didn't want her to look back or his resolve might fall and he won't let her go. Poor Keito but I'm proud of that decision /pats XD

great job, Andez. Next time won't you consider a beta? Take hikicha for example. She's an Indonesian I think but her choice of words are good. Her English grammar as well, of course. It's just a suggestion though~

[kenken18]

well, you know I'm not good in english grammar..XDD

I want to consider beta..
but I worry I don;t have time to read it..TT