Where Will You Go?

[keyzy_kyumsy]

Title: Where Will You Go?
Pairing: OnKey
Genre: not sure(romance?angst?)
Summary: Kibum stopped his hand from touching Jinki, who was asleep. His heart crippled, his hands trembled a little, he was not allowed to touch Jinki’s white cheek, which seems half wet. He could see tears flowing, almost drying on those cheeks.

Kibum stopped his

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[keyzy_kyumsy]

eh?...I also don't know, what is this??....just flowed~~
i even. added a song...=,=...As always...
I ‘m so sorry, with any words of writing, bad grammar and misspellings.
very sorry.

comments, and constructive criticism, from you, so I hoped. *bow*

[rinni1905]

Gosh, baby, you've improved a lot, I was so amazed by your writing. Keep this up, I can't find any words to advice you from now on, just be careful with the capital letters. I really love this fic and you are becoming a very good writer now. Be proud of your work. Keke.

"You can come to my world, if you're tired with your world!"

This! I really love this line, I don't know why, but I can feel how much Kibum loved and cared for Jinki with just this, because Kibum would accept Jinki, no matter who he is, who he would become and what he would do. That's so touching. I really love Kibum in this fic, he didn't talk much, but show his love by actions, I think it's really similar to the real Kibum. Keke.

Baby, I really absolutely seriously love this fic, though there're some dialogues in the end, I don't really understand, but maybe it's because my limited words. I hope you would write more.

[keyzy_kyumsy]

eonni ~~~~~~
eonni ~~~~~
ahhh ~ ~ ~ ~ eonni you come!
ah, I love you, eonni!
ahhh ~ ~ I'm happy!
thank you so much!! .. okay, I'll be more careful, next time!! XD

* Big hug *

that line??!awwww...X3

eonni ~ English,is not my native language, so I thought I was wrong stringing some words (plus my clumsyness)
kyaaa,, I'm glad you liked it eonni!
thank you so much, been reading and commenting!! * bow *
* Hugs *

[heenoona]

yes... you improve ... a lot...
the story line is so very good... keep writing, kay... XDDD

[keyzy_kyumsy]

really??
you like it?
ahhh~~ thanks god!!XD

i'll try better, next time,,,XD

thank you very much!
thank you for reading and commenting.*bow*
thank youuuuu~~~*hugs*

[omiichan]

okay, i think from all ur fics before, im really in love with this.. hmm.. maybe using song as an idea (?) will made the idea flow more naturally?

ughh~ the feeling.. of jinki who always to tried closing his heart, and kibum who trying to help him open his heart.. can i say it like that? jinki's looking for something that can warming his cold heart (?) and it just right beside him..

talking about the last part, remembering when i wonder sometimes why some idol using a stage name? doesnt that look that they're trying to made a new side or what is it? like another one of him/herself.. idk, this fic made me feel that they're trying hard to "playing" their "character" or something like that.. but that's not what this fics meant, and im sorry im rambling ;_______;

this is L-O-V-E and will wait for another onkey from you ^^~

[keyzy_kyumsy]

yes, sometimes, people can not see the things they need, though, things were close to them.

sometimes, I also think, that some of the Idols do look like "it". restrain themselves, and the various pressures that they have received, I think, if nothing is supporting them (the support of the people closest to them), they will feel like it, depressed and lonely. and tried to run away from reality, a way to forget who they really are. (Just my view).

awwwh,, really thank you!
thank you so much!
thank you for reading and commenting. * Bow *

* Hug *

[crazyoverbishie]

oh my.....i really really really really love this piece...my heart swell while u read it...^^

surry i cant give you a concrit...coz i my self still need to learn a lot...so i only can be selfish and saying that i love it...

Jinki needs to open up little more...>.<
and Key always ready to be ther for hi,...^^

pls do write more...ill be waiting for another awesome pieces from you^^

[keyzy_kyumsy]

Awww .... I also am learning!*hug* There eonni-es *looked at the comments above* who helped me. give me advice, and gives frendly words. * Big smile *

really glad you like this...XD

yes, yes, they complement each other. OnKey!!.

kyaa ... thank you so much!
really thank you! been reading and commenting! * Bow *

* Hug *

[crazyoverbishie]

lucky you^^

of course i will^^

you're welcome^^

*HUGS*