ugghh..are you sure about this line *point under* : ["I ... do not take it anymore ..." she whispered, her eyes looked straight into my eyes. "What ...?" I was totally confused.]
i mean..that was Jinki talking rite???
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whhooaa..Kibum is jealous...XXDDD...thats for sure...XXXDDD and they're in love w/ each others...XXDDD
Uhm, sorry that I can't leave you long comment right now, because I'm in a rush, and my internet is so suck. But I'm glad that you continue to write another fic. And I see your improvement.
But.... Yeah, sorry... Please pay attention when you write a fic. Displaying a paragraph in a fic is important too, so try to make it more neatly. And don't put too much dot like this .... You should use just one dot to complete a sentence. And "..." just use when you want to display character's confusion.
And one more thing, I know that you write this in Key's POV and he's kind of crazy, but you should make Kibum's thought and doing more detail and feeling. I hope I will read more of your fic, don't worry, your fic is good. Keep fighting!
awww... This is an honor, you give a comment on my FIC ~ yes, I really liked the "dot", so I like to use it. dot, is my favorite symbol. hahaha but, next time, I'll fix it, and tried to make it more neat.
indeed, thank you very much. This is very helpful to me. * Bow * * Hugs *
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Jinki wanna know Kibum trough his friends... <333
Surely a beatiful day for OnKey
Thanks for sharing this :)
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*hug*
thank you for comment..
hope you have a beatiful day too..^^
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: ["I ... do not take it anymore ..." she whispered, her eyes looked straight into my eyes.
"What ...?" I was totally confused.]
i mean..that was Jinki talking rite???
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whhooaa..Kibum is jealous...XXDDD...thats for sure...XXXDDD
and they're in love w/ each others...XXDDD
pls do write more^^
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ahhh, I'm clumsy like this ....=,=
thanks for reminding me!I'll fix that ...
hahaha ... he,, jealous ... jealous ... jealous .. kekekek
thank you again...*hug*
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you're welcome..XD
well i cant help but notice his Jealousness..XXDDD
you're welcome..*HUGS*
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But.... Yeah, sorry... Please pay attention when you write a fic. Displaying a paragraph in a fic is important too, so try to make it more neatly. And don't put too much dot like this .... You should use just one dot to complete a sentence. And "..." just use when you want to display character's confusion.
And one more thing, I know that you write this in Key's POV and he's kind of crazy, but you should make Kibum's thought and doing more detail and feeling. I hope I will read more of your fic, don't worry, your fic is good. Keep fighting!
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This is an honor, you give a comment on my FIC ~
yes, I really liked the "dot", so I like to use it.
dot, is my favorite symbol. hahaha
but, next time, I'll fix it, and tried to make it more neat.
indeed, thank you very much. This is very helpful to me.
* Bow *
* Hugs *
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