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Zhou Mi faces the oncoming rain with a smile bright turning his mouth. Tastes the country rain with his tongue as it beads in the corners of his lips. His eyes are closed.
Kyuhyun opens an umbrella over their heads and dodges the opaque puddles that pool in sunken gravel.
"Come on."
Because he doesn't want to be left behind, Zhou Mi takes his hand and huddles along downcast underneath the umbrella that doesn't quite cover the two of them.
The sun comes out. Just before Zhou Mi gets sick of the constant rain.
Zhou Mi opens all the curtains and the sun streams yellow light on every surface and warms every colour. He turns his back and lets the sun tickle his naked skin. It's the only house for miles.
Kyuhyun seeks darkness under the blankets and shouts at Zhou Mi for his folly.
As Zhou Mi draws a curtain to give Kyuhyun some peace, he can only remember a time when Kyuhyun would have flourished with the light as he did.
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with a smile bright turning his mouth
I don't know if this is just part of your writing style, but I think 'a bright smile turning his mouth' would read better.
as it beads in the corners of his lips
And here I think 'mouth' would sound better than lips. Idk, this sentence made me stop and go, whut... because lips seemed an odd choice instead of mouth.
The writings nice, but something about this little piece isn't quite sitting right to me. Maybe it's the present tense? Present tense can be done well, but with this little piece at least it feels a little... empty? Nothing's really happening?
I like the last sentence though, and the kind of sad feeling it gives me! Keep up with the QMi, anon, they're lovely!
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I understand what you mean, I'll see how it feels if I manage to finish it, I kind of lost my steam before I could build up to anything.
I adore them. Have for a long time but I never thought I could actually write them.
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"Oh my god, I'm so happy," said Jessica, latching onto Seohyun's back as everyone starts to get up from dinner. "I was so sure I was going to be the only one who wasn't in Gryffindor!"
"Yes, well," Seohyun began softly.
"I mean, obviously it'd've been even better if you were in Slytherin with me, but you would've never been in Slytherin," Jessica continued. "I'm so glad, though! You can sit with me at Quidditch matches, and we can just root for anyone so long as it's not Gryffindor, it'll be fun!"
Seohyun shook her head. She hadn't quite had the time to herself, in the brief moments since her sorting, to process this, hasn't had time to think about house rivalries and Quidditch games and it wasn't even like she even cared about Quidditch, it was just that in all her fantasies about Hogwarts she had never even considered the possibility that she might not end up in the same house as her unnies.
"I knew it," said Sunny brightly, as ( ... )
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THIS IS SO CUTE, AND SEOHYUN AT THE END. fkldkgd i don't even care for soshi but i loved this!
(i thought the girls were on pottermore at first lol)
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and jessica would be in slytherin haha
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I CANNOT EVEN --
WE KNOW BOYS NOW?
Okay, but I genuinely did not notice the tense change and I enjoyed the details that you threw in that are so them (like hyoyeon finding someone to blame for seohyun crying because she would definitely do that) AND TIFFANY BEING JUGGLED BETWEEN HUFFLEPUFF AND GRYFFINDOR, SHE WOULD
idk i just have a lot of feelings about this, anon, ALL OF THEM POSITIVE, thank you so much for writing this :)
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