In the previous post's comments, ice_cold_soda and I briefly got our knickers in a twist over the fact that no one seems to write good child!Nobody fic because that premise would be outright terrifying in the right hands and we would read the hell out of that.
Since I had a day off yesterday, I decided to go and see if I could find a fic with that.
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By the homicidal space gods. I'm only on the fourth chapter, and I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry. I desperately hope that English is not this person's first language, because... wow. It feels like I'm reading a Gloria Tesch novel. (And yes, I know it's weird for that to be the first thing to complain about, but I'm an editor. I can't turn it off.)
Person-who-is-apparently-19, that is not how Nobodies work. That is not how the Kingdom Hearts timeline works. That is not how a sequel works. That is not how punctuation works. And if I see another mention of a starry sky, I'm going to punch a baby.
Though I will admit, the thought of Axel calling Vexen "nii-chan" fills me with shameful giggles.
I'll write more on this later. Till then, Evil Goofy will haunt me while I'm supposed to be describing the metabolic process.
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The starry sky consistently shows up every chapter because why the hell not, let's annoy the "readership" some more. I swear the starry night sky is in it more than Roxas, who is mentioned like five times before chapter twelve (he has that one all to himself and Axel).
The one redeeming quality of this thing summed up in a single sentence. XD
Goooood luck with that. I swear Evil Goofy somehow glued himself to my brain.
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Points to the author for using a Disney character, especially one as awesome as Maleficent. Points retracted for her actions. I like to think that she's just leading them into her lair to use them for her own gain, but I have the slightest feeling that I am not going to get my wish.
Where exactly are they right now? I got the feeling they were in Radiant Garden or some Dumbo-based world, but then they mention parts of Twilight Town. Um, author? You can't have those starry night skies you seem to love so much in Twilight Town. It's stuck in permanent twilight.And what kind of thug harasses two kids with a baby? Especially over their hair? This is partially a Squenix game. You can't go into one of those without expecting some truly bizarre hair. I hardly think this is the first time they've seen anything like it ( ... )
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The weird crackbaby of Twilight Town, Traverse Town, Radiant Garden and the Circus, I suppose. Mention is made of the city of whatever having districts, so I think they were aiming for Traverse Town and missed horribly.
Compared to some of the other games out there, Organisation XIII has relatively tame hair, so damned if I know why the random thugs picked on them.
...that is so much fail just in that description. Dear lord.
I... I kindof want to go pick up one of those books now.
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