my favourite place was me and you: chapter 5

[kikis2]

Title: my favourite place was me and youAuthor: Kiki
Fandom: Glee
Pairing/Character(s): Puck/Rachel/Santana, Rachel/OMC undertones
Rating: M
Word count: 4000
Spoilers: None, futurefic
Summary: Rachel is forced to leave the spotlight and return home to face the people she sold for her dream.
Disclaimer. None of this is mine.

Comments

[fall_into_life]

I can't decide quite how I feel about this story. The first thing I usually look for in fanfiction is faithfulness to the characters, then to the original setting, and then to the storyline, but this piece is forcing me to look at the characters and the storyline. I can't remember the last time I couldn't just sit back and dissect a piece of fiction.

I'll keep reading if you keep updating.

[kikis2]

My characters are pretty OOC. Part of that is probably because I'm not completely comfortable with the fandom yet, but the characterizations are also built around events that haven't been written yet, making it pretty impossible to judge their faithfulness, I guess.

Thank you for taking the time to comment.

(Love your icon btw!)

[fall_into_life]

I don't find your characters OOC, I think the way they're dealing with where you've put them is pretty in character, but like you said, I don't know how they got where they are, so I have no idea if they dealt with the situation then in a reasonable way (ex. Santana/Rachel friendship isn't something that works straight out of canon, but with some maneuvering [:P] it can be believable).

Thanks! I can't even remember when I got that icon, but I've had it for a long time. :)

[xxblacklilyxx]

Im speechless.
I stumbled upon your fic today, and I fell in love with your story. It's very hard to find fics like yours in this fandom, that deal with mature themes and are filled with angst. I dont think your characters are OOC necessarily. I think you've done a good job showing little by little how these three characters ended up here. And that's the story you're telling.nd. The italic flashbacks are very well written and the picture you paint each chapter is heartbreakingly beautiful. I cant wait to read more of it. It's not even about them getting a happy ending, but really finding out where they're going to end up. Even if it's tragic. The story is just that compelling.

And sorry if my rambling is confusing.

[kikis2]

Oh, I'm so glad you like it! The convoluted melodrama I like is kind of a ...niche taste, so I'm glad someone else enjoys it <3

[treasure_chests]

Wow. I just stumbled onto this and read all of the chapter back to back. This story is spectacular and I think the characterizations are perfect. I can't wait to see how this ends!

[kikis2]

Thanks for commenting. It's always good to know I'm not the only one reading my stories :p

[meagan4dominic]

Wow, lots of drama in this chapter, but I like it
I've said it before, but I'll say it again. The way you're destorying Rachel is amazing. Her fall from grace is so addictive, I simply cannot look away.
I love that you covered her and Puck's relationship in this chapter. You're explaining why Rachel is so bitter and messed-up and now I just want to hug her, poor girl. I also really loved that Santana went to talk to Rachel, so sweet. The way you portrayed her inner-struggle of what to say and how to act was perfectly in character

[kikis2]

I'm destroying Rachel?! Aaaw. Oh well, maybe I'll put her back together again :). Writing the emotionally stunted is always tricky lol, so I'm psyched it worked lol.